What is your opinion?
The best book ever
"I love this book so much so please update it- don't leave it on a cliffhanger "
Bibliophile
"First, I just want to start off by saying how much I love this novel. I found this novel by accident after I had just finished reading like two whole books in a week. I was on the hunt for something else to read and I actually found this story from someone who did a review on it! So I got to reading it and when I tell you I read it in two days lol! I'm so in love with the characters especially Adrian lol. As a writer myself I find it hard to write male characters because they are just different when it comes to writing female characters. But the way Adrian's personality is constructed made me fall very much in love with him. I also love Robyn as well I actually love her name as not many people have that name. In a way I'm kind of like her in the sense that I am a huge bookworm and I could literally read for hours on end lol. I love how we see her transforming even with her struggle of having social anxiety we see her pushing herself and making friends and I like that it isn't too fast or to slow it's just right. I love lilith as well! I actually met someone who is just like her, In my very first year in college and boy let me tell you it was alot to take in but honestly those are the types of people who allow you to really open up. I hope we get to learn more about her story! As for some tips I would say there are none ! Lol I would like to know more about Adrian's father and what caused him to be this nasty person to his son. I'm also secretly hoping for love to blossom between Robyn and Adrian but I won't get too carried away. 😂 Please keep up the great work and I hope this review wasn't too long. I wanted to make sure I provided some great feedback for you to work with.♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡ "
Totally Amazing :)
"Okay, so first things :) I really love this book :) I have finished up to the last chapter you wrote and I am glad to return this review :) The plot of the story is written well, I have no complaints about it :) in the beginning; you wrote that it will be long pages and I don't have an issue with reading long books :) I want to add, that adding spaces between the paragraphs would make things a tat easier to read :) I have learned from such experience, many have babbled about spacing... difficulty reading :x The writing style is amazing :) I love how you swiftly change with each character and how the circumstances also change along with your writing :) many don’t give attention to such small details, details about how second and third characters act, how other unimportant characters act around them :) many just trug them off and concentrate on the first and perhaps second or third character :) you chose a personality for every character :) even the unimportant ones :) and I salute you to that :) each individual in your book is written superb and your writing style is unique and definably one of my favourites :) Although I spotted a few sneaky spelling mistakes :) they don’t exhaust the book :) just something we all miss :) Might I add, instead of explaining how well the world looks around Robyn… perhaps try to explain how she sees the world, like you did in the first page, I noticed how the book moves along, you sort of lost sight of explaining from her point of view, into explaining the world’s point of view :) I understand completely you don’t like the first person :) but just to be honest… What I also noticed is some missing information (which I assumed will be added later on?) What happened to his father? I might have missed it, if you added it in the book. Why are both their parents constantly fighting? Is there something triggering them? Why is his father such a nasty dad? These little information adds why it is happening and what causes them to erupt :) try to shorten the length of the book :) I agree with skipping a few paragraphs to read only the sayings :x although you warn everyone it is long :) Inkitt says you can write up to 1500 words and if I might add :) write up to those words or even 2000 if you want and perhaps end it with something that happens to her :) :) I enjoyed this book :) I rarely read teenager books, but this one was worth it :) as a friend, I am still learning as everyone else :) I might not give such aggressive, strict reviews, but I am also trying :) I am still learning the ropes as everyone else, but if my review does not fit your writing :) just ignore it then lols :) I don’t mind :) If pages become too long, they drag the reader's attention away from what is happening :) at some points; the world spins around her and then, at other parts, the world spins around… well the world :x I guess one can lose sight of what is happening in the book :) I understand that third person writers love to write about almost anything… including the characters, surroundings and whatever happens in between and sometimes, it becomes boring, if only the book revolves around the world and not the characters :) not that you drag your characters down, because they are amazing and well written, but looking at those things will surely boost the book :) — She walks to school and spot a butterfly fluttering its magnificent pinkish/brown wings… she imagines what it would be like to fly, rather use legs, which seems to drag sometimes — see what I did there? :) and I am sure you are already aware of it, since the amazing review you gave me :) I am dragging this review out haha :) anyway ——- on to the point :) dragging the surrounding out diminishes the characters and they are just as important as the surrounding itself :) like I said before; I am not a perfect writer and you taught me a few things about writing, which I learned I was doing wrong :) so I hope this review helps pleasantly… :) So on to the characters :) as an emotional lover, I love it when people use emotions to explain their characters; I love reading how they feel and how they act around these feelings :) Robyn likes Adrian and clearly they have strong feelings towards each other (with the shuttering and all) but I would suggest… explaining their feelings more :) how does he make her heart flutter? How does she make his knees wobble? Since she never experienced love before, it should be something that melts her completely? Another question… why does she hide from Conner? Who is he and where does he fit in her personal life? She dreams about being in love, but with Adrain she obviously experiences some sense of romantic side :) Perhaps edit those parts more… —- his pedals peers through her soul, as if he is trying to read her thoughts… —- emotions is such a strong word to write about and honestly, emotions makes a book stand out :) as I saw in your video, you used emotions to explain the situation and I loved it, but it has to be the same in the book :) I love how you use shuttering, because she fears social interaction :) I honestly have nothing more to say haha :) I am out of words :) Primary thing is, I love your writing, and this book is something worth reading; I recommend this book to others and I hope you achieve your dreams of publishing this book and making a movie of it :) Keep writing and please take this as a friendly (friend to friend) review :) I did try my best tho, I hope it helps :)"
simply. AMAZING.
"Omg I am literally in love with the relationship between Robyn and Adrian. Your way of writing is just so good I am amazed, you described everything so perfectly, it's simply beautiful and I could picture it all in front of me. I love everything about this book but it is a bit long for my liking I must admit, but hey you did warn us about that!! ;) Overall, this book is just brilliant and it deserves every single one of the stars I gave it! I would totally recommend it to people!"
Bibliophile
"I love this book, especially the relationship between Robyn and Adrian! I’m really waiting for Robyn to get out of her shell more in coming episodes, but other than that I love it!!"
Bibliophile
"Your literature and writing skills are simply superb. The way you describe each scene it's like everything is happening in front of my eyes. The words you use are captivating and scenes can be imagined easily. I really liked you descriptive skills (i.e. In a scene you have described about the car. It's both sarcastic and sad truth) The girl's character is quite interesting..She is desperate for a book.. Its good. I forgot to say.. At the beginning of the chapter you wrote unedited right. It indirectly piqued my interest haha ha😊. You are a great writer indeed. Last but not least chapters in your book are too lengthy. Please try to reduce the size of the chapter because at a point of time people usually skip few paras and continue reading other to get to know about the story. They might miss the amazing words and description in between. Why to let it waste.. Please decrease the size of the chapter. "
Fantastic!
"I really wished I read this sooner! Your writing style is the kind that I but hard copies of. I adore birdy, the quirky protagonist, with may I say has great taste in books. I must commend your pictorial writing style that is adeptly descriptive but not complex and daunting. Its cohesive and flows so serenely and perfectly that immerse a reader, paints a picture and transport us on this journey with the characters. A very cinematic experience. And often relatable factors. Adrian: "Do not engage! Do not engage! Count to ten!" You have no idea how much I had to chant that to myself, especially in my senior years of high school. You honestly have such a refined talent, and the writing was high level. A simplicity that resonates with readers to find themselves almost similar to them and the proficiency to show a completely original story. You have what it takes to make it big, top bestseller in amazon and net-lix adaptations, if you continue to write has you do. Your own voice and style but always keep evolving because there's always room for improvement. Stellar work, Gracie."
Bibliophile
"I loved this book! As I said on my Instagram yesterday, you have one of the most beautiful writing styles I have ever seen😊 You describe things amazingly and right from chapter one I could picture everything perfectly. The only thing I can suggest, but this is purely my personal preferences, is to shorten the chapters just a bit, I’m not always the biggest fan of long chapters but I know many other readers are. Other than that, you truly deserve every read this book gets, well done❤️"
Bibliophile
"I absolutely love this story from what I have read so far. The descriptions you added make me feel like I am almost there watching it. I can see the scenes in my mind you are describing. The way you write is like the other review says, books you would find in a book store. Can't wait to finish reading it. Keep up the amazing work."
Superb
"Honestly, this book is a real pleasant surprise. The writing is brilliant and I adore the style. The words flow smoothly to create an image in the readers’ minds and chapters are filled with descriptive writing. Although the chapters contain a disclaimer of being “unedited” (as of the time I’m writing this review), I didn’t spot any errors so far, if there are even any. Truly, this book is comparable to those found in bookstores. Keep up the good work! Can’t wait for more. "
Something nice to read
"As promised, here is my review. I'm not a usual reader of teen romance, much less one so sweet and innocent (well you know what I write, hehe), but I have to say that this one caught me. It had something. The characters' development is really nice, and I love that the MC has to fight against something so real as social anxiety because life is not always pink colors and butterflies, right? But above all, I love that Adrian is not the typical bad boy turning into the best guy ever as we usually see in teen or YA romance. He's sweet and kind from the beginning which breaks all the clichés of the genre. LOVE your descriptions (I know I'm repeating myself with the verb but it'd the way I feel), those are really good, so much you can even feel and see what the characters are doing or going through. For me, this is one of the most important things, a writer that knows how to catch the readers' attention and makes them go through different emotions. There are a few things you might want to check though. I don't really mind about long chapters, if they need to be long, let them be! However, the length of the paragraphs is a different thing. Readers sometimes are tired or they're simply lazy, and changing the structure a little bit might help to make them stay. Long paragraphs, short paragraphs, a lonely word creating one paragraph for itself... Mixing all this makes the appearance of the book more dynamic and believe it or not it helps. Also, I've noticed the lack of dialogue in some chapters, remember to show and not tell. Dialogues are as important as descriptions, so much needed to understand the relationships between characters. It's important to find this balance. Anyway, after all this babbling I wanted to say that even if I'm out of my comfort zone reading teen romance (think I said that before...) I really enjoyed this book. It's sweet and relatable, you easily connect with the characters and their problems because they could perfectly be real. The pace is good enough, not too fast neither too slow, and the sentences flow is nice. Definitely something worth reading."
I have enjoyed reading this story
"Your story is definitely out my of my usual zone, but I decided to read it anyways. Readers and writers can both learn many new things when we do this. As agreed, here is your review. I will start of by saying that, while this story is long,. it is great to read. I felt as though there was always something happening throughout each page, which made it interesting to keep reading. We start out by knowing a little bit of details for each character, as they develop and progress throughout the story. The story flows smoothly and builds up. You describe the situations of your characters well. It must be tough for anyone with anxiety to go out and make friends. The good thing is your main character did. I like how you did not just keep her shy, awkward, and showed us that any limitation can be broken. Just like in real life, someone with anxiety can fall in love and share many great times with friends and their special someone. Having anxiety does not mean you are a loner or someone who never wants to have friends.. It is an actual issue that affects many people. Hopefully, others who can relate to this will enjoy reading your story. The pen pal development makes it feel as it is another story within the story. I like that because you immerse it, making it fit nicely giving us more details. I will not state the same as others have, as they have touched on what happened in some scenes or what is missing. I will include what I caught at a constant. As stated before in some comments, your story would read better if you add more breaks in some paragraphs and after each person speaks. Some chapters feel very long and never ending. Perhaps break your chapters into two continuous chapters or shorten them to get to the main point of your chapter. It would flow much better. and read better too. Your writing is impressive. I can feel the dedication you put into your story to make it come to life. You let us feel how the characters feel. To those of you who like teen drama and high school flings, this is your book. It was out of my comfort-zone, but like I said, one can always learn something new. Congratulations on a wonderful story!"
