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Escape The Commander

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Summary

Droe-Toe used to be like any ordinary planet. Full of civilians who prospered. But that all changed... The civilians now live in fear of a mysterious figure who calls himself "The Commander". He ripped freedom from their grasp and soon, people either went missing or went into "hiding". They were never seen again. But soon a rare white flower begins to bloom in the "Shadow" forest. The flower than grew in happier times. Times that Orphan Liya cannot remember. Everything seems...Hazy. Liya is determined to rewrite the history of Droe-Toe and defeat "The Commander" once and for all. But she can't do it alone...

Status
6yrs ago
Chapters
7
Rating
4.5 (2 reviews)
Age Rating
13+

Chapter 1- Escape

Dawn. The suns were rising on the planet Droe-toe. Liya was running, her feet smacking against the bare forest floor. Her purple eyes were wide and fearful, her midnight black hair fanning out behind her.

Loud voices could be heard as the forest whirled past Liya's purple eyes. She made a sharp right, turning down a small clearing. The voices followed her down the clearing, through the twists and turns.

Liya finally stopped when she reached a large manhole style cover which was covered with leaves and branches. She glanced behind her, relieved to see they hadn't caught up to her. Yet.

She knelt down, her light pink dress ripping slightly. Her hands tore at the branches, delicate scratches appearing on her pale hands. Yanking the cover off, she peered into the blackness. She looked behind her and could hear the heavy footsteps and voices getting closer. She held her breath and slowly stood up, almost tripping over.

She jumped into the darkness.

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6 years
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I love how you have started it! definitely makes you want to keep reading 🙂

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Great first chapter. Makes you want to read more.

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