What is your opinion?
cannot complain
"Blue is a book that you cannot put down, I was intrigued by the POV coming from the guy the description of her was refreshing I like your writing, the paragraphs were easy small and fantastic to read I actually hate seeing a massive paragraph and having to read it which you don't and that makes it a lot more interesting and readable , Thankyou and will look forward to seeing more"
Intriguing!
"Loving the story so far! The emotions of the characters are beautifully described and you've a nice writing style! However, there are punctuation errors and some sentence framing mistakes but I've already told about that in comments in where to and what and just little editing will do it. Besides all that,your story is interesting! Ps: Keep writing! Can't wait to know more! 😄"
Wow!
"This is a keep you in your toes book that and amazing read. The writing is so  descriptive that the scene is painted out on every page. This book is one to read."
Sweet
"It was sweet and I could connect to the characters. The writing is good too, just in Chapter 2 suddenly it changed from a first person's POV to third person's pov. I really enjoyed it! "
BLÙE
"This story has great potential. While the grammar isn't perfect, it's still a very legible story that balances a somber emotional atmosphere with stark dialogue that is never weighed down with adverbs. The writing style itself is very intriguing, feeling both poetic yet realistic, reminiscent of Sherman Alexie. I honestly look forward to reading further, and would recommend other people to do so."
Needs work, but will be a good read in time!
"Mandatory disclaimer: not a professional writer or editor. I’m going to skip over the poem at the beginning and start with the prologue. I can tell what you’re going for here, but it misses the mark a bit. When a writer tries too hard to inject emotion into the prose, it feels forced and distracts from any storytelling that’s going on. Also, when the piece flows from one deep emotion to the next, it overloads the reader. Let the depth of feeling come out naturally, and give the reader a break once in a while. The story is written in the first person, but there are a lot of third-person observations going on. Make sure that the reader only gets the information the narrator knows. If the narrator is guessing as to certain aspects, make sure to make that plain. Also, there is a mix of present tense and past tense throughout. That’s a big no-no. My opinion has always been to steer clear of present tense storytelling, though it seems to be in vogue at the moment. I’m probably just an old fuddy-duddy that can’t get with the times on that point. The important take-away is to stay in the same tense throughout the story. The one exception is dialogue. Since dialogue is happening in the now, the present tense can be appropriate. You seem to be aiming for a high-brow style of writing, which is fine, but like the emotion, it doesn’t really work. I don’t want to tear the story down, but mechanically, it needs a lot of work. The best way to demonstrate what needs to be changed would be a line edit with copious commenting. Since that isn’t an option in a review, I’m going to rewrite the entire prologue. Without trying to sound like a know-it-all, I want you to compare it with your original. It is up to you which you prefer, but try to focus on the technical changes I make. Whether you maintain your current artistic style or not, technical correctness will serve you well in the future. The more you know how to write, the more you will understand when it’s appropriate to break the rules. One other VERY IMPORTANT thing. Nearly every sentence is passive. I would urge you to read up on passive voice verses active voice. I can’t think of a quicker way to turn off a read than excessive passive voice. PROLOGUE REWRITE It all started the day I met her. Her eyes, shining like the stars, captivated me. They exuded calmness, but underneath those long, luxurious lashes I sensed something else. They were the bluest eyes I’d ever seen. The way they seemed to change shades when she turned her head enthralled me. Ocean blue one moment, then navy, now baby. No, now they looked nearly purple. Those eyes defied reason, and I loved them. She looked confident in her apparent confusion. Like she didn’t care what anyone thought about her, and I was desperate to know what she was thinking. Her manner told me there’d be no secrets with her. She was an open book, but to me, the words were faded and incomprehensible. I wanted to bring them back to life, to know…her. She was young, maybe too young. Her pink, supple lips spread ever so slightly as she drew in breath. Light reflected off her pale skin. She seemed so innocent, so pure. I had to have her, to chase her down and explore the mystery that she was. But, was she too young for me? The demon stirred in me. It didn’t care about age or purity, only the chase. Before it could take hold, I left. The bluest eyes in the world haunted my thoughts as I fled. Ok, so that’s just an example. You’ll notice it’s shorter than the original (I didn’t run a word count but it seems shorter,) even though I took a few liberties with the story. It leaves out information that the narrator simply can’t know, and would be too unreasonable to guess at."
