gee... where should i start?

"first of all, I will say what's good; you put a lot of effort, and you tried. Now the fun part: the hook was okay. You need a better hook (a beginning that makes the reader want to read more). Instead of starting what a "boring filed trip" you should start with was a fight scene! action sequence! or even intense dialogue that describes the conflict. Also, show don't tell, kid. Instead of saying "eager fisherman" describe HOW they're eager. instead of saying "isn't kind to people" describe HOW they aren't kind to people Also, it moved a little slow getting tot he plot. And as soon as you reach conflict you get the plot, so don't forget to use conflict for your plot. Example: a regular day, then aliens come crashing down (conflict). soon after that, the protagonist have to save the planet (plot). Say what you will, I think this covers my critique. See ya never, (because this is online)."