Another Suicide-Prevention Story

"I find stories about mental issues are interesting. Since about years ago, I am dealing with someone with depression and I could relate well with both of depressed characters and people who are dealing with them. The two chapters are good. They made me wonder about what had actually happened. I personally don't like the idea of writing 'narrator' when you start the chapter with 3rd person point of view. Why don't you just write the info about the POV only when you write it in a character's POV? For example, Chapter 1-3 are from the narrator's POV, so just start the chapter right away, but Chapter 4 is from Hannah's POV, so you can just writer her name when you start. I can't say much from these two chapters, but to be honest, I wonder if you were insipired by "13 Reasons Why", because there were too many similarities between the opening of this book and "13 Reasons Why", including the dead girl's name. I hope this helps you anyway. Keep writing! Regards, Kei Angelus"