Well done!

"I was slightly wary when I first opened this story because I saw how long it was, yet only one chapter, but you did an excellent job. I found the pacing to be easy enough to follow along and brisk enough not to get boring. Your strengths really seem to be in your understanding of the characters and it shows in the dialogue. For me, the biggest factor that decides if I like a story is how well the story and scenes flow together and this story came together extremely well in my opinion."