Sorry for the wait

"I really liked the unrelenting bureaucracy shown at Rebecca’s work, it gives off a good sense of frustration for Rebecca that translates well to the reader. The line about “when you start questioning that things fall apart” also gave a good sense of foreboding and set a tone for how the city functions. Rebecca’s reaction to Jason, and what happened to him, was genuine, and his lead in to explaining the controllers didn’t feel like forced exposition, considering it is supposed to be common knowledge. The fact that she feels guilty but doesn't go too far out of her way for a person she just met is realistic and fits the character you’ve developed so far. The attacker (which I assume is a controller?) is a good balance of mysterious and terrifying. I want to know much more about this world, and Rebecca. I’m excited to see more of this."