Tragic and touching

"Often times, we overlook the flaws that are in the heroes simply because we are heroes. I like that you sort of incorporated that into this story. It went by too fast, and I enjoyed it quite a bit. The writing was enjoyable, and I liked the way you had it put together from beginning to end. The idea of the love and revenge added some intrigue, and I'd love to know Maya's untold story. I noticed some places where you changed tenses, but that happens to all of us. The font on the story is very small, and it was a little hard to read, so adjusting that might help. Great work! I very much enjoy reading your writing!"