What is your opinion?
Great job!
"You have great ideas! I enjoyed reading your story!! I recommend it!"
It was great
"I really like your ideas about certain things. You tried to portray most of your parts gracefully which u found really amazing while reading it. Over all it was a good chapter.."
great first chapter
"The writing is well done. The speed or pace of the action well placed. Some of the ideas: religion, marriage, politics, are clearly thought out in the authors head. I would suggest re reading some of the pronouns. Her instead of He or maybe I misunderstood. The sentence structure is well done. However, I would suggest http://www.hemingwayapp.com/ might make some ideas pop out better. Meaning there might be more vision imagery or a better thought that could be broken into more detail. When done with the above idea of going through and adding some detail. I would suggest this https://prowritingaid.com/ some of the verbs, sentence structure might be done differently to help the reader understand. Finally I have problems finding things to read, and often times lose track of where I am at, or who I am talking with. so repost here https://www.minds.com/groups/profile/902525707628482560/feed?referrer=Talon123 and ask for @talon123 sometimes I reply sometimes I am elsewhere."
