Chapter 1 : Welcome
"In my house there are a lot of rules and all of them must be followed" Natasha Fortune's voice sounded cool and calm through the public address system.
But coolness and calmness, does not describe how she felt, not one bit, and that's because she was taking a very big and dangerous step.
From the computer in her room she could see the faces of the twelve vacationers who are to be her new tenants.
For eight years she hasn't seen so much people in the same place and this new upgrade scares the shit out of her.
"The list of rules will be delivered to each one of you by Aimee, the lady that welcomed you in, and if you have any question please pass it to her and she would help you with your questions.
"But let me say this, the most important rule of all is that no one, and I repeat, no one is to come to the last floor. There are in total, four floors in this building and the last floor is strictly off limit to you all.
"You can go anywhere in this building and not get bored but I must tell you, I value my privacy and I hope you can respect it and abide by the rules. As you've been told, my name is Natasha Fortune and I welcome you to my house.
But before you go, does any one of you have any question for me?"
Natasha could see the questioning looks on their faces and to be sincere she couldn't blame them for it, like seriously who gets to enjoy coming to a house and finding out that the owner of the house you would be living in is a freak who wouldn't show her face but instead talks through a speaker. Talk about a freaky living.
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Δ This is just the beginning
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AJ_Margareth
Hi, a great start to your novel, with an interesting beginning, that has the reader questioning what kind of story this is, and what Natasha is up to. There are some errors in that you are mixing up your past and present tenses. Sounded and felt are past tense, while scares is present tense. Each verb should be checked. We find it easier to write everything is past tense, and this is true for a new writer. It should be 'so many people' not 'so much people.' But well done on making a great start. We love your character, who sounds dominant, but feels scared at the same time. We love the hidden nature of her motives. And we want to read more.