What is your opinion?
Really well done!
"I loved reading Jed's story! Runaway stories are some of the best and I think you did a wonderful job with this one! I can't wait until it's finished!"
Jed's Story
"I really enjoyed reading this! I love the journal perspective! I think you did a great job captivating the reader as well! the only thing you need to change is in chapter 11 where you have paragraph split apart in the middle of sentences. Again I really enjoyed Jed's Story, I'm sorry that it took me so long to finally review a book of yours."
Review
"I read the first piece to see if it was my style of reading and it's not exactly. I will continue to read it when I have spare time but I believe this was enough to review. So to start you got really involved with the story and that's necessary to me. However it often times felt like rambling or filling the space, like you wanted to map everything out in a way. Like it was both a movie and a picture/Manga type book, if that makes sense. Sometimes rambling and filling is fine when writing but this felt a little over the top to me. I'll keep reading to see if it continues similarly. As far as the rest it had decent storyline plot from what I understood about each character and such. The characters had some depth to them so overall I would say it's worth a read, I'm a picky kind of person with reading. Aside from the above not a whole lot wrong with this story for the first piece."
