Beautiful!

"It was a beautiful and heart warming short story and I would even go to the extent of saying that I loved it. The transitions between past and present were smooth and nothing seemed odd or out of place. Especially the first chapter was wonderful! It's ability to make me feel a number of emotions in a single chapter, with just some words, is amazing. I just have a few things to say though. There were a few mistakes in the second chapter, which can be easily removed if you go through it once. Also, even though I really liked your writing style, I would say that you could've used a stronger language (like metaphors or use of words that we don't use in daily life) when describing their present situation. It is good now, but I think it would become better if a better description of Ryan's and Christina's present situation was described, so that we could 'feel' their pain. Apart from it, it's just beautiful. That's all I have to say."