What is your opinion?
Extraordinary😍
"The story is so well written and characters, even if they are quite a few, are extraordinarily handled by the writer—excellent descriptions, not dull and unique characters with such personality. I keep thinking that it will make an exceptional movie or series, why not. Congrats to the writer and I will be waiting for more.❤"
Interesting
"Nice short and sweet description. Just change 200 to two-hundred. Love the use of Lilith, a Christian demon that is fitting for the goddess of death. I also like how her and Samuel are opposites. The descriptions of their appearances are clear too. I would change halo to something else like shawl or shroud to make it more dark in Lilith’s description. Love Diamond and Mercury and story transitioned well into following them, very dramatic. You really set this world’s mythology up well. I’m a little confused about the bit where the draconi all pick things to go with them by Forest. He says animals, but would that not include the birds Sunshine picked? I think this needs to be clearer like insects or deer. Also why is it that their speech is in bold please? I think that needs to be made clearer. I think the descriptions of the element daughters’ appearances could be more detailed too. I also think there could be more development of relationships between characters, and that development would make the chapters of the story a little longer which I think would be a good thing as they are very short. The bit where Jynx can keep her powers under control by wearing shoes and gloves reminds me of Elsa in the first frozen film, and I think that needs more of an explanation. In fact many of the chapters I think could do with more detail to them and to be longer, unless you are planning on a sequel, which I would understand. This is still a well planned and interesting fantasy story. "
