What is your opinion?
Wow
"Just like my heading said, wow This story will be interesting truly looking foward to more. Its cool how the writer Describe, and told the story. Its a scifi futuristic story. Didn't notice mistakes so we good. Hope you keep this going and cant wait to read more. Well done and hey I totally reccomend it!"
Good
"Your description is attention-grabbing but the puncturion needs work and sentences need to be looked at again as they are too long in places. As a myth and legend fan/nerd, the mention of King Arthur made me smile. The description to me does give too much detail away, keep some secrets for later on in the book. The opening is interesting, a classic that reminds me of the Princess Bride. However, you need to add who is speaking where more after lines of speech as it can get a little confusing, and add some detail to what else is going on in the setting around the characters. There is a bit where you dip into first person then go back to third person too. You miss capital letters for Mars and need to add commas to your sentences as they are stretched too long or break them up into shorter sentences. Also are you giving names to your chapters or just numbers? Having ‘Chapter 1 Opening Day’ and the rest just ‘Chapter 2’ etc looks messy. The story does flow well and moves at a good pace, keep it up! "
