What is your opinion?
The tides of life
"I love how this story grabs my attention. Once you start reading, you can't stop. Love the storyline "
Interesting
"The story holds mystery and a lot of questions. Like how the story is developing. I'm intrigued in knowing there reasons and everything that truly happen. The story structure is well written so well done. I didn't notice mistakes so good so far. Keep up the good work!"
An emotional story of young love
"This is a story that stems from a catastrophic event that shatters lives, and caused love to be found in an unlikely place. The description itself I felt was a little long but still set up the story well. Your paragraphs are a little bit short, but only by a couple of lines nothing major. There are one or two times where you don't use the proper punctuation at the end of speech. Right away you get a truly heartbreaking understanding of the pain Amelia has been through. Anyone who has been to a funeral can really feel the emotion and relate to it in the description of Amelia’s boyfriend’s funeral. I do relate myself to how supportive and strong Nick is to her, and that along with his nickname ‘Mel’ is a clever way you have shown their closeness. You can also understand why she feels so conflicted about her feelings for Nick, she is very emotional in the story and has been through a lot which makes it very believable, but also understand why she is finding solitude in him as no one else is supporting her or is there for her. I think you should get rid of the POV and just keep the name after each chapter number, it worked for Malorie Blackman and countless others. Also, I would make sure the font is the same for all the chapter names just for the sake of being consistent. In chapter 2 there is oooone lonely little lowercase ’I’ that needs to be capital and towards the end, you need to start a new paragraph for the bit of speech. Nick’s thoughts on love and relationships and girls liking bad boys are very typical for a teenaged boy and almost comical at how obvious he is. In chapter 3 there is some confusion about Amelia addressing her mother. She calls her Mom, Mum and Mother in a short space of time. Is she American or from another country that uses Mom or British or from another country that uses Mum? This being established will also help set the scene better for the reader. In chapter 4 there is a typo with Nick’s name. I feel at times it would be good for the characters to share why Kellen did what he did. The fact that Kellen doesn't know how mean Amelia’s parents are does make the reader question how strong their relationship was. I think that should be changed as the minor detail will show their relationship’s strength and make how much his death has affected her to make sense. I know this story is about Amelia and Nick but I think that small detail is important. The pave is very good and doesn't drag on which stories with a lot of emotion in them like this can risk doing. The flashback I think would work on its own chapter and would be made even better with a bit more to the descriptions. Overall this is a romance that stands out and is a lovely yet heartbreaking read. "
