Absolution

"Excellently done! There are a few odd word choices, but those were minimal. You've captured the essence of Slughorn quite well, I think. Snape was drawn well too. The sympathy between the characters was very good without becoming too maudlin. It is very easy, in this type of story, to let the POV slip away from you, but you pulled it off for the most part (technically, he couldn't have a POV of this story after being Obliviated). Canon error: Snape never knew what a Horcrux was."