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Back for Her: an Irish Mafia romance
"Well fuck me that was a hot book and I want more!"
Back for her; an Irish Mafia romance
"What a great book. With a nice twist. Was wondering when they would do the deed. "
Awesome
"So in love with this story. Depressed already that it's a shirt story. Interested in mire from this author "
I LOVE IT
"please please please give it a try! It’s absolutely amazing and swoon worthy 😩"
Back for her Irish mafia
"It's amazing I love the author's work "
Hpcosie
"I am enjoying this book but a week to wait for one chapter is a long time. I hope it’s more than one. I’m going to give up checking soon."
Good
"Good so far"
Back for You
"Sorry it took me a little while to review it, got a little busy. The concept of this story is unique, especially with what mafia books I've checked out before. Gone is the good girl who stumbles upon the bad boy who's secretly apart of the mafia, and instead is a powerful as fuck girl who doesn't take any shit, the powerful boss and owner of a hot club in New York City. In the place of a good girl is two boys back in town, old friends of Kylie. Alex is the "good boy you'd take back to Mom" the one who desires a relationship while Jackson, or Jax, would rather fuck any girl, but none of them takes the place of Kylie it seems like. I really have enjoyed this new spin with flashes of badass and girl power. Now, there are quite a bit of grammatical errors, mostly missing commas. It's a first draft, to be expected. Maybe consult Grammarly, it has a free package and from what I heard works well. Also, there are some moments where paragraphs need to be broken up but haven't. And there seemed to be thoughts woven in with a narrative, but seemed to get confused and mixed it. Perhaps use italics to seperate it so it doesn't confuse the readers. And there were some confusing sentences, but doesn't distract too much. Try and show a little more, not tell. But I really do like the story so far and really can't wait to read on. There's so much you can do with this story. I'm excited to see where you take it. Hope this helps any, and I'm sorry the review is so long. But you're a great author. Cant wait to read more. Keep up the good work! Keep writing!"
Nice book!
"This is a lovely book with a lot of potential. Kylie is a strong woman. Jackson and Alex have such a good bond. The story is truly engaging with strong characters. Can't wait for more updates...."
Good read
"The cover is pretty, but it gives me more of a spy story impression. The description sets up things well but it is too long, a little repetitive in word choice, and few things could be changed to make it shorter. I would change NY city to NYC. The line ’coming back home won't be as simple’ I think could flow better by changing it to ’That won't be as simple as they’d hoped’. Also changing the description of Kylie to ’the young and wild beauty’ I feel works better. As well as this changing ’She’s still wild and even more trouble than she was when they left her. There’s an even bigger problem.’ to ’Now even more of a handful than when they left her, she brings one massive problem with her’. Like I said though things are set up well and I love that we are starting from Kylie’s point of view. It's refreshing. You left a very big space between ’Kylie’s POV’ and the first paragraph, but that could just be Inkitt’s layout. Your detail is excellent, paragraphs are a good size, and your grammar and punctuation is good. Starting a sentence with the word and twice in a row is a bit repetitive and I’d change it. Your sudden change to Jackson’s point of view I think would be better as a new chapter. The line ’if we can get as good business here as we do in Los Angeles, we are never going to worry about another thing’ would be smoother as ’if we can get business here as good as we get it in Los Angeles, we’ll never have to worry about another thing ever again’. You set up Jackson’s character well. ’friends of the Murphy’s’ would work better as the ’friends of the Murphy family’. I would get rid of the ’---’ in the second chapter, you don't need it as you progress time fine with the start of the new paragraph. Your chapter size is all over the place and I think defiantly needs to be reconsidered. Your pacing of the story is good though and the cliff hangers keep the reader hooked. A good read."
I liked it
"I really like the plot l. It's unique. Way different than other mafia novels I've come to read. I was so fed up of all the damsels in distress good virgin girls catching eyes of the bad boys. Few grammatical mistakes, but I guess you can work with them. Looking forward to more chapters. Well, keep breaking the stereotype"
Bavk for her and Irish mafia
"Look forward to reading more 👍🏼❤️👍🏼❤️"
Irish Mafia Romantic Story
"I like it because it's a romantic story."
