Discovered Undercover

"It has an intriguing plotline, especially considering they're are sending one of the previous victims of the drug lord into the field to find out who he is, (I like that this is addressed). You should separate the dialogue from each character so we can keep track of who is speaking. Shorter paragraphs, being met with a wall of text can be both daunting and confusing. You should show more than tell, like when she's going from the car to get into the elevator, maybe she could a sinking feeling about getting on the elevator. Acronyms, (like FBI) need to be in all caps. I only noticed a few spelling errors, other than that, keep up the good writing."