What an Opportunity!

"I know you submitted this for feedback, but I want others to see how touching this piece really is. There something special about how siblings support one another, even when their interests couldn't be more different. When the protagonist pushes her own feelings aside, she is rewarded with joy and love from her family. I always enjoy stories like this because there's just too much drama out there. These little diamonds deserve to shine, too! As I mentioned in another one of your pieces, your tone and plot are great. I think proofreading and some technical editing is all you need to make these book babies perfect. The most effective editing platform I've worked with is Grammarly, but you need to have a good grasp of tense to make such it does throw you off. Keep up the good work, pal! I've got a fan in me!"