Caught up in her feelings
Primal is a take on real people living in a world next to us, but not with us. This woman - trying to live a life driven by her passions - is forced to reevaluate herself, and not a moment too soon! As fanciful as this other world she never dreamed she could be a part of is, there is danger and adventure waiting to begin.
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Unfortunately, there is so much thought and not enough environment to immerse into, making the story more emotional than adventurous. I believe if the author could reel in the overwhelming reactions and share more sensory information the character is experiencing the story's flow would improve. There isn't much movement displayed, and I often wasn't sure where I was because the character didn't think about it. I also got lost multiple times with what was going on: a busted lightbulb she never heard breaking, a lightning strike without any visual description, etc. The first-person perspective is solely dependent upon what the character perceives around them, so it's important to describe what they are experiencing outside of their head as well as inside.
That being said, the pace is too slow for MY liking in a fantasy story. The first two chapters alone could have been condensed to one, and I would have been more engaged to begin with. If we are focusing so intensely on the protagonist's romantic feelings about her breakup, it's not really surprising that this is going to lead into a spontaneous - albeit reckless - one next. Her negative opinion of a group of men she's about to run into just sounds like she's describing her next bad decision in love. This follows a romance-driven formula, and if this was not the author's intention, the focus should be reevaluated on what could be edited down to speed up the story to reach more action and conflict. I honestly believe this has incredible potential as a romantic fantasy novel, using this introspective approach, but if the aim is a dark fantasy with a revenge twist, they should consider revisiting their description and pacing.
All in all, not a bad read. It just isn't for everyone.