What is your opinion?
Beautiful
"Hi there! This piece was very descriptive! It pulled me in and held me there. I'd be super pumped if I could read more! I really liked how you connected Cami's memories of Izzy with the real Izzy: her brown hair and how she dyed it brown with Cami once. I also liked how you connected the child to Izzy (I assumed they were one in the same?): the child's chocolate brown eyes and Izzy's chocolate brown eyes. Things like those, super small details, often get overlooked. You did a great job! Keep it up!"
Mystery and Intrigue
"The story is well written and I was immediately transported to the landscape of the New Mexico desert. I wondered if you used this barren landscape to symbolise the internal state of your main character - as there is definitely more to her than what is presented. I absolutely loved the tone of the story, it is conversational and flows well. You introduce the mystery early which kept me wanting to read more. If you do plan on expanding the story, I definitely think there is lots of potential."
