What is your opinion?
The Hard Crush
"I really liked this book and I can't wait to read the second one!! Don't give up on writing 😊"
Love the author
"I love how the story started off slow but with each chapter it picked up that Hillary tho sounds pretty desperate"
Nice
"Nice work i aadmire u author "
omggg no words its just ❤❤😍🤩😸
"i love the book so afar.. waiting to see more work of urs .and new storiess toooo ❤❤ . u should really read this book and ASAP"
High School Crush 1 Feelings For You
"Your characters are very realistic. You introduce them quickly and very well without overloading the reader with information. Very good use of physical distinguishing features and verbal ones. I never had an issue with recognizing who was speaking or thinking. Chapter TWO needs a bit of a touch-up. Some of the sentences are much simpler than the ones used in the previous chapter. For example, you wrote: “She hated it that that he was very healthy and wealthy.” Maybe you meant to write it like that, and I’m looking too much into it, or it’s a stylistic pet peeve, but I think the “it” can be easily removed to strengthen the sentence and the following ones that use it as well. She hated that he was very healthy and wealthy. Or She hated it. He was very healthy and wealthy. The second example, in particular, I really like because it characterizes Winifred seamlessly. This is all just a suggestion, of course. If the paragraph structure is to your liking, keep it. Since the characters are mostly teenagers, try to avoid words like “ill”, “deteriorate”, and the like because conversational English rarely sounds like that, even if academics speak it. Simple, everyday words are fine, and they ground the character for the reader. Some of your sentences have unnecessary prepositions, and at other places, they’re missing, so have a once-over when you can. Most people automatically correct those, but they break up the flow of your sentences and paragraphs for those that notice. For example, you wrote: “His mom was really fragile when it comes to the emotions.” This is functionally correct, and everyone understands what you mean, but it's clunky. What might read smoother is: His mom was really fragile, especially when it came down to emotions. Or His mom was really fragile when it came down to emotions. The plot is easy to get into and engaging. I think you're doing a great job of transporting the reader to the world of a highschooler. The main characters have a clear goal, and the way they're reaching it is interesting to follow. If you like writing, keep at it, because you don't get better only when you stop!"
