What is your opinion?
Immersive
"I really enjoyed this story, I felt like I was sitting there watching everyone interact. The story had good comedy without trying to be funny. I do wish that the story could have gone on a bit longer though."
A Kind of Review
"Well, I liked it. It was fascinating and charming, kind of dramatic. It's paced nicely and could be worse. Actually, it was really nice, The Chinese 'romanji' or 'pinyin' could use some work. Honestly, your grammar and wording was a bit choppy, so when I first read it, I thought you got it off google translate. I mean, the usage of sayings is good, but fitting it in with the sentence, it didn't feel quite right. In China (I speak Mandarin, with a bit of a Beijing accent) we would just say chou, not fu chou. I'm not feeling it. The ni zai kai Xiao hua / ni kai ge Xiao hua / ni Xiao hua / hi zai shou wan Xiao touch is pretty nice. These are all ways I'd put it speaking to my friends. Wang en fu yi, that's the best one in the chapter. I like your incorporation of my language, so I'll wait and see. The banter is really nice, the comedy is highlighted :)"
Look, A Review!
"MILADY! Finally found this! I feel like I can't say much because I'm not into Firefly quite yet, but I think I understand the premise of the series, and thusly I can appreciate the comedy of the situation you put them in. The angst generated by lack of angst is adorable, and you convey it well. Your style seems a *little* bland, perhaps because you want to focus on the dialogue between characters, but as a person who's never seen Firefly I would appreciate some description of the characters. Maybe throw in something that is exactly who that person is, something that would make a reader feel like they're watching an episode of Firefly. SPAG on point, as always, and I sally forth to read the next chapter!"
A nice story!
"What a charming slice of the life of Serenity's crew. Very well written with voices spot on, I found it charming and thoroughly enjoyable. Thanks for contributing this! Okay, need to write at least 200 characters..."
