What is your opinion?
Woah!
"The content of the story is amazing! I always check the content of a story before reading it and this definitely has a good content..The writing style of the story can be a little polished so there would be a wide range of readers💙...Other than that it’s good and beautiful scripted down, this story can attract a big wide!..🥂Cheers to the Author"
Struggle to Read
"I'm extremely confused. The story starts with your MC looking at their own body. We don't know how she died or why. Just that she is, which is fine. After that it seems to get jumpy and dodgy. And I don't know where I got disconnected at. It definitely grabs your attention un the beginning, where there's more description, but after that it's gone. At least for me, I can't speak for everyone. MC's grandmother makes a brief appearance, but we don't know what either of them looks like. Or why this side character is important to the plot. Aside from to give the MC a message. There are some discrepancies with what descriptions are there. A person's eyes cannot be bare...that would be kind of scary, if not mortifying, to see. I would think that 2 ghosts sharing the same astral plane would be able to see the other ghost walk away (my own opinion) instead of just vanishing. I like the story, I just can't get into it because I feel like there's something missing from the first chapter and I wish I knew what it was besides descriptions and an explanation. I feel like too much was left for the reader to decide. Which sometimes is okay. But doesn't work well for this story in particular. I will be keeping an eye on this one though. There's something intriguing about what you've started working on."
2/5 💫
"This story needs a LOT of editing. I suggest taking it down, replanning the whole thing, and seriously doing some research. The writing style is subpar and does nothing to actually explain the plot of the story. There are also a lot of convenient things that happen, such as you introducing the main character by saying, "Isn't that the woman that works at the tarot shop?". I can't say much about the other characters of the story, because they are hardly explained or even introduced. If you have more questions or need me to go further into explaining something, I'd be happy to."
