Couldn't Get Into It
I just couldn't get into it. I'm usually a fan of this genre, but the way it was written was off-putting to me. I feel like literally, every novel starts with either a waking up scene, aka almost late for school, or an introduction about the character. But with fantasy, and especially your work, I expected something more unique. Maybe starting off in the magic shop as a little prologue? Talking about the magics of your fantasy world? A cutscene from another part of your world? Your spelling and grammar needs a little tweaking as well.
Read the story now
This story might catch on with some of the users here (who might just be sugarcoating things to get a review for themselves not to downplay your skills, but its something a lot of users do here and I want to offer you an honest review that will hopefully better your writing) but I doubt this will get very far with the actual Inkitt staff. I'm not trying to be disrespectful, or rude, but I really think you should consider adding some plot changes.