Things I think you did well on:
Read the story now
(-) The cover
(-) The idea of the plot
Things I think you can improve on:
(-) Paragraph formations
Some paragraphs are way too big, and some are entirely too small, and it just throws off the entire story.
Remember, your characters are people, not robots
(-) Text message formations
When texting, put the senders' name in bold, or italics, or underline it. Otherwise, it just ends up looking like a written play. Also, are your characters relaxed people? If so, make sure the way they text reflects that.
Lots of errors. Before posting use a website like Grammarly.com (it's actually what I'm using now) to check your work ahead of time.
Your words sound choppy and robotic. It's a story, not an essay.
I would have liked to see the ways Kelly is bitchy, or how mean Aurora's husband is. I want to be able to get sick of the characters and feel the emotions Aurora feels. Again, this is also choppy.
You spent 3-ish paragraphs describing her outfit. Thats entirely too much.