Intrigued

"Love the plot so far the 2nd chapter was a bit harder to follow since didn't yet snap what was going on, but got the grip on it from chapter 3 onwards. So that's the only thing I can say is to change up the way the 1st two chapters (prologues) are written and even split the second as it is quiet long. Noticed a few mistakes such as she that was written uhe (or other) but can simply be from typing too fast, I tend to do the same a whole lot more. Loved the chapters up till now. Further suggestions I could make is: Before Delta started 'going out' with Trison I hadn't had that sense she was as 'funny' as she came off from after meeting Trison. Another is that when she is told about the 'Mr. Brown' and how Trison looks identical I would expect her to at least question the idea... As Brown had already tried to 'get acquainted' with her and then just after his failed attempts here comes Trison... And Trison even 'works' for Brown? Some building/questioning/doubts/or other factual truths to elude readers around that part could help a lot for the few people who can connect the dots a bit too fast sometimes, or in too many directions (I have several ideas where this might lead - and one sticks out really well for me that I would like to doubt a bit more to give a better sense of mystery) I'm glad the Giant Za is 'kind' enough to respect Quist as he does at the end of Ch 14. All in all I'm still intrigued by what lies on ahead for this tale.!!!"