Born in hell

"Hey. Your story has a good start. I like the plot of the story ✨🌟. You have a clear idea where you want to take your ideas. However, there are few issues 1) there are lots grammatical errors, which can easily be fixed :) 2) instead of having a straight single long para. Break them into small one’s. That’s makes it easy to understand. One single long para is kinda hard to read and doesn’t seem appealing. 3) separate the dialogues. The dialogue’s are in continuance which makes it hard to understand what’s going on. 4) add more details to the background of the characters!! Overall it’s good ❤️. I hope this will help :) "