Kizzy

Great start!

Hey. So let me start by stating even though only 2 chapters are out I’m hooked. Usually the concept of wolves and vampires is straightforward which is of pure jealously and anger but you have introduced a new concept.

Keep writing I wanna see how things turn out. ❤️🦋

🤩🤩🤩

Damn!!!! (So far)
The theme of the story is not a unique one but the way you have added your own twist and turns makes it one. ❤️💯.

The transformation of characters from the beginning till so far is well conveyed. I could totally feel the emotions of them. SO HANDSUP FOR THAT! 🙌🏻🙌🏻🙌🏻

I totally recommend this book to all the werewolf lovers. This one is for you. Add it to your reading list now. 😻😻

Great job. ❤️❤️

So far so good!

I have read 10 chapters so far and it’s good. I really like the plot of the story. Author has very cleverly used imaginations to give own set of twists and turns which keeps you on edge but there are few things I would like to suggest-
1. There is lot of jumps in tenses. So it makes it hard to keep up.
2. Just do a quick reading to re-structure the Sentences.
3. Abs there are few grammatical errors but that can easily be fixed with proof reading.

Overall it’s really nice! ❤️😤🤩🤩

Good!

It’s a really good one. I like how the author has taken its the concept and given its own flavour to it. It’s not a regular story. There are a lot of test and turn that one would not see coming.

There are few grammatical errors but that can be easily resolved. ❤️❤️❤️

Meeting you!!

Hey. So I’ll be very honest.
Good start. I like the theme of the story. However, story is super rushed, adding details to the character’s and scene would really help. ❤️

Personally, I couldn’t connect emotionally to the book ‘cause of lack of details and description. Too much is going on too fast. ( but it’s just a personal opinion, you don’t have to make the changes if you don’t want to ❤️😊)

Good luck ☘️☘️

Great !!!!

Hey. I really like the construction and theme of the story. ❤️❤️ Even though I’m not horror genre person but this book had me hooked. The curiosity to know what is gonna happen next and the death scene description had me on the edge.

There a grammatical errors which can easily be fixed. ( I face the same issue with mine 😅😅. So I totally understand) but it didn’t stop me from enjoying the book. 💕💕

Great work.

Great !!!

I really like the construction and idea of the story. The death, inner conflicts and ghosts is not a unique concept but the way you have presented and conveyed the message makes it one.

The writing style is too good and let me tell you, you’re an exceptional writer ❤️❤️.

Great !!

Hey. Overall the story is really nice ❤️❤️. They have you have conveyed the emotions is exceptional. I can actually feel all of her emotions. However, my only concern is the plot. I don’t know what’s exactly going on but still it didn’t stop me from enjoying.. ✨✨✨

Waiting for an update 🌟🦋

The head of the table

Hey. I really like how you started the book. The summary was really clear of what to expect. The details of the gambling match that you’d added was really precise, I could actually feel the tension and excitement 🌟

However, I couldn’t quiet understand the part where - the girl lost her factory to him, how can he stop her from continuing the school ? And why was the principal telling them about it? Isn’t he the one who should be taking decision ?? So that part was kinda blur and unrealistic for me.

Second, background of the other character’s such as the brother’s. Maybe adding a few background details about them would be good. (Personal opinion :) and the relationship status that they have with their friends. As I was confused about the part where the two guys were in a room together and one of them got coffee for another. So are they in a relationship or was is just a friendship thing? I’m sorry I can’t remember the names 😅).

So adding details would really help :)!!! But overall I liked it ❤️❤️

Great !!!

Hey. Your story has a great start. I really like how you have given the background and smoothly connected it with the present time. However, I would have really liked to know the reason behind moving from place to another :)

Next the plot, really good one❤️. The construction of the plot is really good. You have started off by giving the information but at the same time keeping certain things in suspense, which really does the catch. But I feel the story is going really fast.

The emotional part, the Grandma’s and main character’s relation really does the charm of emotional connection. I could really feel the emotional connection!

I’m all in for this. Looking forward to the next chapter!!! ✨💕

🤩😌

Hey!!!!
What a start ❤️. I really like the plot and construction of your story!!!! And the sarcasm is like the cherry on the top. However, there are few grammatical mistake, which can easily be fixed :) !
Great work 💕💕. I can’t wait for the next chapter

ALPHA’S LOVE

Hey, great start. I really like the plot and construction of the story :). However, there are few grammatical mistakes but it can easily be fixed. Gonna keep reading it ❤️

Great !

Good start!
It’s a unique story line. ❤️🌈 definitely worth a read. I like how the author has taken time to describe every relationship. There are few grammatical and tense mistakes but it can easily be fixed with proof reading.
❤️

Good start for first book!

It’s a short love story between two strangers who meet by fate.

It’s short, sweet and simple. ❤️🦋💘💘
As it’s authors first book there are few errors which can easily be fixed-
1. There are lot of changes in tenses. At times I was getting confused if it’s all happening in present or past.
2. I wish there were little more details and maybe drama. It was just too simple for me.

But I wish all the best for your future writing. ❤️🐥

Good!

So let me start by saying good start. ❤️ I know as a new writer all the challenges that we face but with all of that it still didn’t stop me grok enjoying your book.

Author has done a good job sigh details. You know what is happening with the characters and their emotions but I feel there is just too much overflowing of emotions and details. I was a bit difficult to catch up at times. (But you will get the hang of that in proper time). So don’t worry. 🌈

I wish there were a bit more details about Karies and John’s love story. I would have loved to see those little details that made them fall with each other.

Overall the book is good. Keep writing. ❤️🌈

XoXo

Good start!

So far is good! You have a lot of potential. You are in what way you have to take the story which is a good thing but I suggest (and it’s only a suggestion ☺️) instead of revealing all the problems and twist at the very beginning save it for later. That will hook the reader. Right now I know how the story is going to go so it doesn’t interest me much. Maybe you are going to add few some twists later ( if that’s the case it’s all good)

2) writing style is good. How you have tried to convey the emotion through but try to add some pauses and inner dialogue more. So we can get to know the character more.

Keep writing. Cant wait for more. ❤️❤️

Love,
Kizzy!

Great !!!

Good job.🤩

I really like the theme and construction of the story.
You did a great job at conveying the transformation of Gray. I could feel all the emotions and reactions. ❤️❤️.

There was a well balance of hot and humour. Those embarrassing scenes really added the spice. 😌

I’m all in for this book. ✌🏻💯

Nice !

Hey, it’s good so far. I really like the construction and theme of the story. You have a clear idea where you want to take the story.

The relationship of Alaina and Dean is so good.
I really appreciate you taking the idea of a plus size girl as a main character over a zero figure girl. ❤️🤟🏻

However, there are few things that I would like I like to suggest -

1) Introduce an interest twist in the beginning of the chapter which will make the readers wants to read.

2) add more humour.

3) There are few grammatical errors which can easily be fixed. ( we all face the same issue ✌🏻)

It’s just a personal opinion, if you don’t wish to make it, it’s all good. ❤️

I wish you all the best ☘️✨

Great!!!!!

Great work!!!!!! I was on the edge of my seat the entire time. This book has well balance of mystery and humour. I’m going to suggest it to all my friends. People if you are into mystery and humour, this book is for you. Add to your reading list right now. ❤️❤️❤️

Good luck ☘️☘️

Great !!! 🌟🌟🌟

Great story so far🌟🌟
I’m in love with this book. Anyone who’s into fantasy this book is for you. Add it to your reading list now! ❤️❤️

Nice !!!

Great sneek peek ❤️❤️❤️

Nice !!

I really like the construction and theme of the story. The suspense is terrific and well maintained. It really does the charm. I truly loved the friendship bond of Ava and Gabrielle. ✨🌟

Your imagination and power to convey it to us is so good. Especially the action scenes.

However there are few grammatical errors which can easily be fixed :)

Good job ❤️❤️

Great !!!!

Hey... Okay so great start!! I really like the construction and theme of the story. Very innovative and creative story. 🌟🌟

However there are few grammatical errors which can easily be fixed :) ( I face the same issue to I can understand 😅😅) but it didn’t stop me from enjoying it.

I’m really looking forward to read the rest. ❤️
Good job 💯💯

Great !!!

Great start. I really like the construction of the story and the theme. You chose a Dark theme, which is a really bold choice :). Most of the high school stuff is just about happy cliche couple and some bunch of jackass. But the dark twist that you’ve added really does the charm ✨✨

However, there are few grammatical errors which can easily be fixed:)

Born in hell

Hey. Your story has a good start. I like the plot of the story ✨🌟. You have a clear idea where you want to take your ideas. However, there are few issues

1) there are lots grammatical errors, which can easily be fixed :)

2) instead of having a straight single long para. Break them into small one’s. That’s makes it easy to understand. One single long para is kinda hard to read and doesn’t seem appealing.

3) separate the dialogues. The dialogue’s are in continuance which makes it hard to understand what’s going on.

4) add more details to the background of the characters!!

Overall it’s good ❤️. I hope this will help :)

Ray of sunshine ☀️

Hey. Let me start by saying good start. I really like the construction of the story. You have managed to show the contrast, which isn’t easy thing to do. The dark and bright side of the MC’s life really adds to the emotional connection. ✨✨

However, I feel the pace of story is fast. Ray got attached to Dark really fast. I would’ve loved to see connection grow with time. Adding more details would help to slow down the pace as well as help us feel their connection deeply :)

Second, the development of the character’s. I just wish there was a little more development for them.

Third, there are some grammatical errors which can easily be fixed (I can understand this cause I’m facing the same issue 😅💕).

Overall, you did a great job ❤️❤️

Great!!!!!!

Hey. So I started reading this book at 11:30pm and it’s 3:40am rn. I just couldn’t stop after the first chapter.

So let me start by saying, great start. The construction of the story is really good and well planned. I really like how you have given the background details about the characters and smoothly merged them in present time ❤️❤️

However, I felt the story was rushed in the end. And would’ve loved to see more about the love story between the characters. (Personal opinion)

But I totally enjoyed it. :) great work 💕🌟

Great !!!!!!

You did An amazing job!!!!!! I really like how the story started with a background and kept on developing. The touch of emotions and lust were cherry on the top ❤️. I can’t wait for the next chapter :)

Little tip, you can add at the top, who’s point of view you are giving ‘cause it kinda becomes difficult to know who’s point of view is going on as it frequently keeps on switching!

The alpha’s obsession

Hey. Great story. I really like how you started it. However, I feel the story is rushed. Maybe adding details would help with the pace but still it didn’t stop me from enjoying. And grammatical errors which can easily be fixed :) Looking forward to the next chapter 💕

💕✨✨

Hey!!!
Good start ❤️ I really like the plot of the story, how you have shaped it throughout the chapters. However, there are grammatical errors which can easily be fixed:) would love to help you ! Cant wait for the next chapter

Archangle

Hey! So let me start by saying great start!!!
Your summary is really Catchy ❤️. I really like the plot; how you have managed the intense chemistry between the girl & mysterious guy and at the same time also giving a suspense angle to it 🤩🤩✨

However, I would have really liked if you would have added background details in the beginning chapter. Also a few grammatical errors but which can easily be fixed :) !!

But nothing stopped me from enjoying the story. Looking forward to the next chapter 💕

GREAT !!!!

Okay let me start by saying great plot!
I like how you have sustained the sarcasm and high level chemistry between the characters throughout. 🌟
I know I have mentioned this already but the chemistry and tension between the characters is amazing ❤️
However, I think maybe the words aren’t clear at times, ‘cause of which I wasn’t really able to catch what you were trying to convey. But it can easily be fixed :)
Overall I loved it. Gonna Keep reading it 💕

Amaris

OMG. This book❤️
Let me start by saying great start. The suspense in the first chapter really does the work.
In the following chapters, all the emotions and steamy hot stuff just really kicks in.
I can’t wait for the other chapters.
Good job 💕

Great start!!!!

Awesome!
Thrillers always excite me and author has added a special twist to the story. So the story revolves at wound a serial killer who goes around killing single women. And a young girl waiting for her revenge.

I like how you are including the inner dialogue’s of the dead. It helps to understand them better. But my suggestion would be try to give a little more detail about 1-2 dead women. It feels very superficial right now.

The dialogue And writing style is good. There are few grammatical errors but it can easily be fixed.

Cant wait to read more chapters. Update soon mate. ❤️❤️🙈💌🌈💯🦋

Totally hooked.