prologue
Alessia was laying down from just waking up from a nightmare, she was panting. She was also in her human form, she has emerald green hair color, orange eyes, and a fluffy vest, and shirt, black boots, a skirt that has some spikes on it, and lastly some arm wraps. Alessia slowly got up and looked around then got up to get something to eat.
Alessia pov
I woke up from a nightmare I sweating and panting, after a few minutes I got up and went to get some food. I placed my hand on my heart and then black light shined all around me then I was my dragon, my dragon has blackish-purple scales with black claws and red eyes with a pointed tail.
An hour later
now I was trying to catch a sheep I was swaying my tail back forth ready to jump at it, I jumped and latched my claws into it feeling the blood pour out of it as it perishes very quickly. After eating it lick the blood off my claws and stretch out. As I was stretching I hear something in the bushes, I quickly rose my head and bring out my claws
and go see what the noise is what I find makes me ga
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This is interesting :) sweetie .. you have a lot to learn from writing :) nothing bad meant .. firstly Grammarly and ProWritingAid are the two top apps to use .. you can download it for word documents or even if your typing straight from Inkitt .. you can add an add-on for your web browser your using :) secondly .. I can see what you meant with the Grammarly .. they will fix everything for you, sweetie :) all right here is the helping hand --- i should always be capital -- I -- when you explain her surrounding area .. rather explain minimal .. I get you want the reader to understand what is happening around her and where she is .. but with minimal information .. you can get the same reaction as with dramatically long sentences .. it's not a bad book .. it's really a sweet book and you have a potential idea going here, sweetie :)
Another thing I want to talk about is .. show don't tell .. so all author's hear about this at some point in their career's .. by reading other books and researching on the computer .. it gives you the ability to learn what it's like to show the readers what the character is feeling and how the world around them feels .. but keeping it also minimal is ideal .. emotions is also strongly recommended in the-first-person view :) you want to refrain from explaining too much .. like the last part .. you could say she gasps when she sees the surprise instead of telling a bedtime story :) you are your own unique writer .. I'm just trying to help you in this :) not trying to change who you are :) you don't have to take my feedback hun :)