Pretty cool

"I’m gonna be straight up honest. Reading about Janets erotic fantasies about Curtis made me feel disturbed. I don’t think it has anything to do with your writing, but the way she was talking about it made me cringe. (I think that’s what it’s supposed to do though, right?) no hate intended I’m just talking about the character ahaha Anyway, a little tip: when writing dialogue and imagery, I suggest keeping them separate. For example, “Hi,” I said. The room was beautiful, dark crystals dangling from the chandelier. See how I made them in two different lines/paragraphs? That was just an example, but let me use one from your story and separate them. I was completely in space, staring at him. Wishing he could just pull me close and kiss him. “Janet! Are you okay?!” He called. I don’t know if I made any sense, but that’s basically what I’m trying to say. Also, don’t forget to add the quotation marks when Janet is speaking! I spotted a lot of times where there were no quotation marks and it got me confused ahah but your story is great! Might I add I love your details and descriptive words, they make the story interesting and an intriguing page turner! Sorry if I’m acting mean, I’m jut trying to help you😅 Good luck with your future works x"