Review swap

"I think there were a lot of run-on sentences, lack of punctuation, things being spelled wrong, and plurals/possessives being messed up in this story, which is distracting from anything in the plot to me as a reader. Overall, I enjoy many stories about music and I don't know how close to music this author is themselves, but most of the parts about music seemed pretty authentic. The one thing that I would change in regards to the music parts is that, when the narrator met up with the street musicians you said they played "their piece" for an hour. From my experience, if a bunch of musicians get together without sheet music they don't just play "a piece," they just do more of a jam session where someone lays down a beat and then someone else puts chords over it and then others take turns improvising melodies. So maybe instead of saying they played a piece, just say they had a jam sesh. Makes it sound more realistic."