Intriguing story, but hard to read

"I just read the first part of this story and thought I would review it now. I had mixed feelings about this story. It has a lot of potential, and the beginning had me really intrigued. I wanted to know more about Molly and her struggles. But it was a bit hard to get through. The writing itself made me think of a stream of consciousness type thing, because in a lot of places the sentences blurred together, and there was little to no punctuation. I think that if you worked on the presentation a bit, it would make the story clearer and more legible. Also, would take the bold font off the writing -- it's a little distracting. I hope that this helps. I think that with a bit of work, this could be a great story. Keep writing!"