The Unseen

"I have read enough to give my review on The Unseen. I love the storyline. You got a lot in your mind and I noticed you're putting it down on paper in a rush. I love the build-up of the story because the way you started was absolutely fantastic. I noticed the work had not been fully edited. Words from the different characters overlapped and the use of punctuation was almost completely ignored. I know you can fix this, please do so you polish the story nicely. Your Grammer usage should be carefully monitored to allow for easy read and flow. Try to see if more actions come into play. I mean aggressions and all that, to depict what the title entails. What are the mafia groups doing? Give the story more life by more actions. Overall, I love the story and it will make an interesting read for a larger audience. Good work, Writing Curlyhead."