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"I like the plot of the story a lot, and it has some intriguing, new to me elements, like the deer/human shifter. However, it doesn't feel like you've done enough world-building so far, just simply stating facts, hence my 3 stars. Maybe a few more colourful descriptions would help. Technically, there are quite a few grammar and punctuation mistakes, but you state this is a 1st draft, so I'm confident you'll sort them out eventually. Keep up the hard work!"