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Nightshade

I like the premise of your story a lot since it gives me "Alien" vibes.

However, you introduce a lot of characters in one single chapter without providing any sort of background for them, and that was confusing. I couldn't keep up with all of them. Consider introducing them gradually, relevant to each scene.

Technically, there were a few typos here and there and some wrong grammar forms, so another edit is needed,

Keep it up!

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Guardians of the mountains

The plot is really interesting so far, and the world-building is good, though it felt a bit rushed.
There are a few technical mistakes. I tried to point out most of those under the individual chapters. I'd suggest an online editor like grammarly to help with that. The main issue is the change between present and past simple and the use of incorrect verb forms.

Finally, I'm not sure about the transition from 3rd person pov to 1st. I've never seen a book starting with an all-knowing narrator and then changing to the character's pov.

Keep up the good work!

PS.: I'm getting Robin Hood vibes, which I love!

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A god named sin

I liked the story a lot, and the meet-cute was sweet.

However, I'd have liked to see some more "colourful" descriptions, especially regarding Sophie being hurt. It reads a bit flat right now and like you got hastily to it so you could get to the romance. Considering that it is a big part of your character, you should pay a bit more attention to it. But that's just me!

Keep up the good work!

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Angel's spring

The plot seemed really intriguing and promising, but I'm afraid it was hard for me to read through the text.

I don't understand most of your sentences. The syntax is bad and, in some places, you even forget the verbs. There are quite a lot of grammar mistakes, too. If English is not your first language, an online editor like grammarly could help you with technical things like punctuation and stuff. And the tenses, especially, since you seem to alternate between past to present simple, and sometimes you even use the past participle form of the verb.

Again, the plot is good and you could do some amazing world-building here.

Keep up the hard work!

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Let me love you forever

The story already shows much promise and I hope we'll get to see more of the main character's issues with addiction apart from the obvious stalking problem. You describe Jules being obsessed very well, and her inner voice as she narrates her parts is creepy as hell. Spot-on!

There are a few punctuation and grammar mistakes, so the story will need another good edit.
Keep up the good work!

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Wild in the night

I love your descriptions and the whole narrative. There were a few typos and wrong words (lose instead of loose for example) but nothing that took me away from the story. They can be easily fixed, anyway.

Your writing and the premise of the story is really good. Keep up the great work!

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Thorns

I am going to start with something that put me off this story right from the start and hopefully help you understand the 1 star. In the first chapter, you have a man proposing to a teen and asking her to have his babies. That's not my cup of tea, and it shouldn't be anyone's, really. If you don't change this, please put a warning to your story.

On the technical side of things, you have a single sentence lasting for 15-20 lines of text. It happens a lot during your story. That makes the story difficult and confusing to read. I've also noticed that, for the dialogues, you alternate between single '' and double "". You should stick with one, usually the double. There are also quite a few grammar errors, but I don't think they are a priority right now. Besides, a free editor could help you with those easily.

If I have misunderstood sth, please let me know and I'll try and revise this review.

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Warrior

It was a good attempt at writing a story. However, I'm sorry to say this, but I didn't manage to finish reading all the uploaded chapters. There are too many mistakes that make the story hard to read and I kept being pulled out of the plot. Some sentences are too long, others have verbs missing, you even keep using the wrong words, for example "then" instead of "them". Punctuation needs a lot of work, too, and you should pick a tense, present or past, and stick with it instead of switching back and forth.

I'd also suggest to try and work the flashbacks into the storyline and not interrupt the flow every second paragraph to throw some information at the reader.

The world-building was interesting, so you should concentrate on the technical side of things.
Keep up the hard work!

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Warrior Mate

I started enjoying the story more when the chapters became longer as it didn't seem to move forward before. There are quite a few technical mistakes as well but a good edit can fix those. The plot is a bit cliche but the mystery only just started so I'm waiting on that.
The cover is gorgeous by the way.
Keep up the hard work!

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Wayward Lords

The story has very nice descripti0ns. You can picture everything vividly. However, there were a couple of things that made it hard to read. First of all, there were too many names mentioned (both people and places) in the prologue. I had to concentrate to realize and remember what is what and who is who and it pulled me out of the story. Also, you should consider breaking the paragraphs into smaller ones. I noticed that, in many places even as the story progressed, the descriptions go on and on and there's no much dialogue between them. To me, that was quite tiresome because I prefer the characters to interact more.
Other than that, the plot was really interesting. Keep up the good work!

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The girl who lived in the shadow

An interesting mystery. The interconnection between the two girls, Hana and Monica, is nicely set up and very intriguing. Small town murder suspense that can unfold into a great story.

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Her alpha, his omega

I enjoyed this story, It was well written and edited. My only suggestion is to shorten the chapters as they can get tiresome. Keep up the good work!

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Good worldbuilding

I liked the worldbuilding at the beginning. I particularly enjoyed the little tidbits of greek mythology. It took me a while to get all the names straight, but as I kept reading it got easier. There weren't any noticeable grammar or punctuation errors. One thing I'd suggest is to separate your dialogue bits when 2 different characters speak.

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Alexa I

I liked the fairytale(esque) vibes of the story, even if the explicit scenes felt a little out of place.
I would have liked the characters to be more fleshed-out, though, with detailed backgrounds for everyone and not just appearing once, like the fourth wife that you kept bringing up but she only had an actual appearance in the second to last chapter. As a mother figure, I felt she should have played a more important part in Alexa's decisions.

Additionally, I'm not overly fond of characters just narrating some backstory to another character and you did it a lot in this story. For example, when Taron (if I remember the name correctly) just told Alexa everything about the prince's life. I prefer to see these types of events somehow incorporated into the narrative, unless they are impertinent to move the story forward. Here, it would be more impactful, I think, if she learned about such things from her aunt, if you couldn't have included a flashback chapter or something.

Furthermore, there were some discrepancies between how you've presented the king throughout the book and his first and last appearance. His decision to accept Alexa as a future queen wasn't at all justified by what you had told us about him thus far. If anything, you'd expect him to be the biggest obstacle.

Finally, Himea's plotline was left wide open, but you said there was a 2nd book coming so I'm expecting to see more of her!

Apart from the above plot-holes which are totally a personal opinion. the writing was pretty good.
Keep up the good work!

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Thorns and Roses

I like the story so far, although I can't offer a full opinion on the plot based only on 2 chapters.

I'd suggest reading through it once more to clear up some sentences that are condensed and others that seem disjointed. Also, the second chapter doesn't seem to move the story forward, and it's way too early to have filler chapters as they tend to bore the reader.

Your descriptions were nice and colourful, If you manage to make the narration less stilted through editing your sentences, this could be a great story.

Good luck!

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You are my flame

The story is good and has a lot of promise, however, I wasn't able to connect with the characters. I didn't feel the romance either, to be honest. I'd prefer if there was something else also at stake instead of some teenage love. The language felt forced at some points, and the narration stilted, not flowing naturally as they were growing up.

In addition, it's too slow for me. You have 21 chapters describing the past, and nothing has happened yet to suggest why the friends broke apart. Perhaps when you get to the point of them reconciling and trying to forgive it'll be more interesting.

Technically, there are a few grammar and punctuation mistakes, but nothing major.
Good luck!

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Fragile things

It is a strong start, though I can't offer a full opinion on the plot yet based on this one chapter. However, you already manage to describe your characters perfectly through their mannerisms, setting them apart from each other. That is really difficult to do so early on, but you did it well!

Technically, I couldn't find any flow. I'm looking forward to seeing where you go with this!
Keep up the great work!

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Project Anima

A great story, very well-written. The mystery is intriguing and managed to hook me in from the start.

There are a few typos and punctuation mistakes, but a thorough edit will deal with those.
Keep it up!

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The criminal's rose

The plot of the story can have a lot of potential, but it needs a lot of work.

First of all, the writing is stilted, a lot awkward at places, with poor descriptions. Simply put, it reads flat, colourless. Furthermore, the meeting between Michael and Rose lacks spark. For me, their connection doesn't make much sense based on that first interaction. There's simply no intrigue there.

The twist you include in the first chapters with Rose looking for someone and the police station was good, capturing the attention of the reader.

Technically, there are a few mistakes, mainly regarding punctuation. You also mix your tenses in some points, jumping from past to present simple.

I hope I was able to be helpful to you.

Keep up the hard work!

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Blacked out

The plot of the story seems interesting, but I encountered several problems that kept me from fully understanding and enjoying it.

First of all, you currently have huge blocks of text with barely any paragraphs in the first 3 chapters. That got tiresome pretty quick. Furthermore, when different people speak, you should put their dialogue bits in different paragraphs. Right now, it's sometimes difficult to understand who is who at the beginning of your story.

There are also quite a few grammar and punctuation mistakes, as well as typos, but a thorough edit and a good online editor could help solve those. The most important problem is that your descriptions are, to me, a bit flat. You should add a bit more "colour" so as to invoke deep emotions. As the story stands now (I'm in chapter 11), it reads like a list of events instead of making me feel something for the characters. But I understand that's totally subjective.

Keep up the hard work!

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Brightest star

I'm not sure if there's been a mistake, but the first 5 chapters you have uploaded are all the same, so basically I can only give feedback on one chapter.

The plot, reading the blurb, sounded interesting. However, your writing needs a lot of work. There are a lot of typos, grammar and punctuation mistakes, but those could be solved with a good edit. You should also be careful of long sentences, as they often tend to lose their meaning.

The most important issue is that the way you describe things is a little flat, not invoking any emotion. Currently, this first chapter reads like a list of events that happened to your protagonist instead of some deep, soul-searching confession.

I hope this helps! Keep up the hard work.

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Diary of a gold digger

The story has a strong, intriguing start, but I can't really give an opinion on the plot with only one chapter uploaded.

At this point, my advice would be to do another round of edits. There are a few mistakes and, at some points, the syntax of the sentences reads a bit awkward. Nothing else to comment on so far!

Keep up the good work!

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The badboy girl

I can't offer an opinion on the plot yet with only 5 chapters uploaded, but, so far, it seems like it could be a good YA read.

However, there are major issues with grammar and punctuation. May I suggest an online editor like grammarly to help filter through most of those? It's really great, especially for non-native english speakers as it helps with tenses, prepositions and punctuation. As it is, the text was too hard to read, and I kept being drawn out of the story.

Keep up the hard work!

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Time Less

I like the plot of the story a lot, and it has some intriguing, new to me elements, like the deer/human shifter. However, it doesn't feel like you've done enough world-building so far, just simply stating facts, hence my 3 stars. Maybe a few more colourful descriptions would help.

Technically, there are quite a few grammar and punctuation mistakes, but you state this is a 1st draft, so I'm confident you'll sort them out eventually. Keep up the hard work!

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Ice in warm blood

The story has a lot of promise, but as it is, you didn't fully take the chance and do some good world-building. In particular, I'm not fond of the way you just recite the creatures etc of your world by having the main character reading out of a book instead of finding a way to incorporate them into the narrative.

In addition, the dialogue parts read a bit unnatural to me, and the flow is quite stilted and, at times, awkward.

Again, this has a lot of potential, but my general feeling is that you need to work on your descriptions. Keep up the good work!

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A reason to live

The story is not bad for a first attempt and the plot could have a lot of potential.

However, the many technical mistakes didn't help me to immerse myself in the story. A free online editor could fix most of those, though. In addition, you keep changing the tense you use throughout the story, jumping from present to past simple, sometimes within the same paragraph. You should pick one and stick to it.

Finally, the way you divide into chapters doesn't make much sense. Some have no continuity with the next one. The whole timeline is a bit off, at some point describing the same events through different povs that don't really add anything extra to the story.
I hope these comments help!
Keep up the hard work!

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A warrior's heart

The pace of the story is spot on, with never a boring moment. The dynamics between the characters are well described, and their interactions believable.

There are a few punctuation and grammar mistakes, as well as some typos, but nothing too serious to take the reader out of the story.

I'd love to see where you're going with it. Keep up the good work!

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Hunt...

I like the premise of the story, and you have the chance to do some really great world-building. Unfortunately, this doesn't happen all that much in these first few chapters you have uploaded. In my opinion, it feels like you just list information and it didn't manage to excite my imagination with some nice descriptions.

In addition, the first chapter is too long for an opening chapter, with nothing "explosive" happening to keep the reader intrigued.

Keep up the hard work!

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Some live, some die

I like the plot of the story and the period setting. Your technical writing skills are almost flawless and the murder twist was intriguing.

However, in my opinion, your writing style could use a bit of work. My main issue is that you use dialogue to blurt out information instead of narrating parts. In other words, you tell us things instead of showing us. The chapters so far read like a list of facts, to me at least.

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Just as you are

The story is too slow-paced for my tastes.
In addition, the lack of pronouns combined with names that can be both male/female made it hard for me to understand who was who. As you have each character narrating, you also rarely use any names as to whom they are referring to, instead keep repeating "he, him, his" or "she, her, hers". That makes the text even more confusing, as you can't easily decipher who is standing in front of them, sharing the scene.

Additionally, since the story is written in 1st pov, the individual characters' inner voices should be more discernible. As it stands, it feels like a single person narrates. There wouldn't be any difference if you'd forego the character's name at the beginning of each chapter. The exception to that is maybe Kiki, solely because of the idioms she uses in her speech.

Grammatically, there are a few mistakes, but nothing too critical.
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Running into you

I can't offer an opinion on the plot so soon, though as you are already four chapters into the story, I'd suggest speeding things up a bit or at least add some "explosive" event to start with.

On the technical side of things, there are quite a few grammar mistakes. You should pick a tense and stick to it, as, in some chapters, you jump between present to past simple. Also, you seem to repeat the word "as" a lot. At some point, I counted 4 within a couple of lines. See your opening paragraph for an example of this.

Finally, when different people speak, their dialogue bits should be in different paragraphs. Sometimes you do this, but a lot of the time you just jumble everything into the same paragraph. It's quite hard to understand which character is talking like that.

I hope these comments help you somewhat.

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Untold secrets

Your story has a good premise, but there are some things that make it hard to read. The most important of those is the compactness of the dialogue parts. When a new character speaks, their dialogue should be in a new paragraph. The way you have it written, a single paragraph containing 3-4 different people talking, makes the reader unable to understand who's speaking. It took me a while to decipher it!

On the technical side of things, you have a few grammatical errors. At some points you confuse the tenses, jumping from present simple to past simple.

In addition, the pace was a bit slow for my tastes.

Keep up the hard work!

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The Moon's Fangs

Some of the best writing I've seen on inkitt. Your descriptions are so vivid, especially the action parts, and the pace of the story is spot-on.

The plot manages to draw you in from the first chapter. Technically (punctuation, grammar etc), the text is flawless.

Keep up the great work!

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Rose

I liked the world-building you've done so far. Your descriptions are spot-on and you have managed to create sufficient intrigue to keep the reader entertained.

There are a few discrepancies throughout (see my individual comments under chapters) and quite enough typos, but nothing excessive to take me out of the story.

The only thing I didn't like much, is the abrupt change in the relationship between Damien and Rose; how she was scared of him at first and he wasn't supposed to be messed with. but then he becomes shy and friendly. Maybe you should put a few scenes in between, explaining his character better.

Keep up the good work!

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Complexity

You write really well, and your story is as fast-paced as it needs in order to keep the reader intrigued.
However, I'd like to see more character building, especially regarding Colt, and have further insight into the world of the Japanese mafia. The latter, though, might come later as you continue the story.

Keep up the good work!

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Lotus

An intriguing story, relying on an always fascinating mythology. The characters, though, weren't as fleshed out as I'd like, especially the secondary ones that could have been strong allies/enemies. You also had a great opportunity to write some epic scenes describing the use of their powers, which you didn't take full advantage of.. Or at least not enough for me.

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Neema

There are a lot of grammar and punctuation mistakes throughout the chapters so far, that took me out of the story. May I suggest using a free online editor to take care of the majority of those?

Other than that, It is a good attempt at world-building, with half-human half-vampire creatures that to me were new. However, the writing felt stilted in many places, especially the sex scene.

I love that your MC is a person of colour, which you don't see often, and that she's powerful herself. The plot with her ex is also intriguing, but overall, the writing needs work.

Keep up the hard work!

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Somewhere safe

I love this story so far. It's easily one of the best I've read in here. You deal with a difficult subject nicely, sharing just the right information to paint the picture for me.

Only a few typos and grammar mistakes, but nothing too important to make me snap out of the story.

Keep up the GREAT work!

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Masquerade

The story seems interesting. though some individual chapters seem unconnected so far.

There are a lot of technical issues which I have highlighted in my comments under each chapter, so I won't repeat them here. I'd suggest using a free online editor for some grammar corrections as well.

Overall, the story has a stilted flow, and most parts read like a list of events. The world you are trying to build has a lot of potential. You could reach it by being more descriptive and colourful in general.

Keep up the hard work!

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The project

You've done a very good job regarding world-building.

Your characters are described nicely to make them likeable and the pace of the story is spot-on!
The only thing I'd change is to make some of the sentences shorter instead of putting in too many commas.

Keep up the good work!

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Lilac Storm

I enjoyed the plot of your story a lot. There are quite a few grammatical errors and typos, but those should be easy to fix.

What I didn't particularly like was the change between first and third POV. It was unusual and it can be avoided by using Adrien's pov, for example.

Finally, you had so many chances throughout to add epic descriptions with the elements and stuff. That would have been really nice to see. Consider the whole "show don't tell" thing.

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Her rejection

I enjoyed the story a lot, though I'd like it better if it was a bit more descriptive than simply telling facts. Also, quite a few times, you confuse "you're" with "your" etc, so maybe another edit wouldn't go amiss.
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Ill Omen

The poor grammar made the story difficult to read. The majority of these issues can be solved using an online editor like grammarly, especially for not native speakers. It can help with correct forms and tenses and prepositions. That being said, I've based my overall rating on the plot and the writing style.

The chapters so far are a lot confusing regarding the characters. It is quite unclear who is who, and you introduce too many characters in the same chapter without explaining why they are there. Tilda and Nathaniel for instance, are just namedropped with a single piece of dialogue. You could omit those and, if they become important to the story, introduce them at a later chapter in more detail to avoid having them all appear in the first chapter without reason.

The dialogue bits need work, too. First of all, clarify who is speaking better. Separate paragraphs for each character's dialogue and not just adding a name after the "..".

Overall, the story could be interesting, but it needs a lot of work.
Keep up the hard work!

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Peace and war

I don't normally go for full-on erotica, so it wouldn't be fair to comment on the plot.
That being said, your story is very well-written and structured. I liked that the chapters were short and to the point. Also, Anastasia's emotions were conveyed in a manner that made the reader empathise with the terror and confusion she felt. I sense Stockholm syndrome.
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39 minutes

I enjoy the story so far. You write clearly and manage to portray emotions well enough.
A unique, to me, storyline that can't wait to see how it plays out.
Keep it up!

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Divine

I love Greek mythology, and your twist on it makes it even more interesting. Everyone expects Hades to be cold, slowly melting under Persephone's love. It was so nice seeing him loving and caring from the get-go.

There are a few punctuation mistakes but they can go away with an edit and make the story close to perfect. Another thing I'd suggest is to shorten some of the chapters.

Keep up the great work!

By the way, I'm greek so I understand what "Kore" means. Maybe, though, you need to add a sidenote?

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Spirit of fire

You have built a very interesting world, so beautifully described. There are a lot of details in the chapters and maybe you could eliminate some of those to make the chapters shorter and easier to read, but, still, it never got boring.
The dynamics between the characters were great and made all of the protagonists likeable, even the evil ones.
One thing that felt a little off is that I couldn't decipher the characters' ages. Are they YA? NA? Perhaps you already mention it and I missed it, in which case I'm sorry!
Keep up the great work!

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The Willow Rise six

A mix between The Magnificent 7 and Six of Crows. I love both of these, so I really enjoy your story so far.

There are only a few typos and technical mistakes that are easy to fix with an editor. One thing I'd suggest is to make Sam's chapters a bit more equal to the others' as they are now disproportionate and seem to leave quite a few of Sam's thoughts and backstory out of the plot.

All in all, a great job! Keep up the excellent work.

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The last

You've done a very good job so far. The world-building is great and the dynamics between the characters well described and interesting.
A few things could be improved (see my comments underneath the chapters for those) and you could improve grammar and punctuation by using an online editor.
I'm looking forward to more updates!

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Interesting

The story starts with an interesting twist: your female protagonist running away with not who you expected her to. That kept me hooked. There are a lot of mistakes regarding punctuation and grammar. I know that we all try to edit as much as we can, but there are online editors that can help a lot. You should consider checking those out.
Keep up the good work.

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Tormented

I lIked the story a lot! Just enough mystery in every chapter to keep me curious. There are very few grammar mistakes that can be easily fixed with an online editor or something to make the book close to perfect.
I also liked the change of POVs so that we got to know what both characters were thinking.
Keep up the great work!

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The truth behind his mask

At first glance, I liked the premise of the story. The plot can be powerful with the correct tools. A few suggestions:
a) Pick a tense and stick to it. You switch between past and present simple a lot, and it gets confusing
b) Consider putting the characters' thoughts in italics to separate them from the rest of the text because right now they read as a whole block where points of view are switched without explanation.
c) The writing style is, for me, not pleasant to read. I noticed that you keep breaking up your sentences, ending in sentences not well-structured, and sometimes without even a verb. It's ok to do it once or twice to emphasize something, but you seem to write only in that form.
d) It needs a thorough combing-through, but that's not that important at this stage I think.
I hope these points help a bit. Keep up the hard work!

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I am Kaspar

You do a very good job regarding world-building. I have a few pointers, though, apart from the fact that it needs good editing which you already note yourself.

First of all, 4 children born at the same time are not called twins but quadruplets. A minor detail maybe but it stuck with me while I was reading. I have also left some comments with things you should look into.
Finally, the tone of your book, its inner voice if you want, doesn't seem fitting. While I was reading, I thought that I was dealing with 15-17 year-olds, not 5 years old kids. No 5-year-old has that kind of sinister and consistent thinking and speach. Sure, you explain about Kaspar, but everyone doing it doesn't make much sense. That's my take on it, anyway.

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Crazy rich kids

The premise of a story set in a mental health institute was interesting, at first, but it soon lost that vibe. None of the characters behaves like they are in a psychiatric ward, and it feels more like summer camp. There was definitely a lot of giggling (you do use that word a lot) and the characters' behaviour doesn't instil any sense of mental health problems, especially in the way they talk about their condition to strangers and how they treat themselves and their own problems. I need to see some darkness in such characters, and not schoolgirls giggling at each other, so maybe try adding some levels.

Punctuation could use a bit of work, too.
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Evermore

A hooking plot, I won't lie. However, there were quite a few technical mistakes. Punctuation needs a lot of work (you can use an online editor for this), but the most obvious one was that you kept repeating the same words over and over again in the same paragraph. There are many examples of this throughout the text. I t is ok once or twice if you want to give emphasis to something, but it gets tiresome after a while.
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Alpha's faire

I like the story a lot so far. There are a few punctuation errors, though, so you should consider an online editor to get rid of those. I'd also suggest shortening the chapters as they can be quite tiresome.
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The Betrayal

The story starts strongly enough plot-wise, but there are many technical mistakes that pull you out of the story constantly.

First of all, there are some points where you switch from 3rd person POV to 1st within the same paragraph which just makes no sense. Is a narrator talking or your main character?
There are also a lot of misplaced commas that make the reader pause in the middle of a sentence with no reason at all. I'd suggest using an online editor like Grammarly to fix those alongside other technical mistakes.

The plot is interesting though so far.
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Torn between mates

The plot was a bit too slow for me. The first 6 chapters just kept repeating the same information; that the protagonist has her birthday soon and hopes she's the alpha's mate. It was a bit tedious, to be honest. I'd suggest being done with the birthday in the first 3 chapters at the most, and then go on with the twist.

As far as world-building goes, it felt like an info-dump instead of making the reader engage their imagination. It's a mythical world, so there should be some "magic" in reading the story.

There weren't many grammar mistakes so it was quite easy to read.
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I hear you

The plot of the story was unique to me and I enjoyed the premise quite a lot. There were lots of technical mistakes, though, hence the three stars.

Apart from punctuation mistakes, you also mix-up the tenses a lot. You keep switching from past to present simple, sometimes within the same sentence. Also, some of the dialogue bits are a bit confusing... Quite a few times I couldn't understand who was speaking and had to make an educated guess. That was because while the same person was speaking, you were breaking his short dialogue into different paragraphs which usually means that we have a different speaker. There's a different punctuation mark if you want to break dialogue into different paragraphs, and that could help the reader along.

All in all, it was an interesting read. if you fix the things I mentioned, my 3 stars could easily turn into four.
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Mysterious roommate

There were some major grammar errors that made it impossible to finish reading the story. Punctuation is easy to fix with an online editor, but there are missing prepositions, while the author confuses words and keeps mixing up the tenses.
I cannot offer an opinion plot-wise as I only managed to get through the first 3 chapters, but the flow was pretty stilted and, in some cases, just a jumbled mess of info dump.
The story needs major re=writes, in my honest opinion.
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Recrudescence

The main character of this story is quite possibly the most interesting character I've read recently. I can't decide whether she is schizophrenic or she has some kind of power. The first would be really great to see.
That being said, there are a lot of grammar and punctuation mistakes that make the text hard to read. You should also shorten your paragraphs to make it less tiring. If those are fixed, my 3 stars can definitely become 4!
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Reign

The story is very promising, but the world-building falls a bit flat. Although very imaginative in general, you should consider enriching your descriptions instead of having your main character spitting out information. I also suggest using an online editor regarding punctuation as there are quite a few mistakes.
Overall, the plot so far is interesting. Keep up the hard work!

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The lone alpha wolf

The plot of the abandoned wolf-baby could be interesting. However, there's no structure to the story. It reads more like a writer's hasty notes. Also there are too many punctuation mistakes that should be edited out to make the text more easy to read.

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An alpha's vixen

While it adds some twists to the usual shifters story by adding different species, some parts read a little bit too unnatural. The interactions between the characters and the dialogue bits could use some smoothening. Also, I'm not really fond of the ''mates lose their minds and jump to bed'' trope, even if that's what most books under this category do. You should give more depth to their relationship, an advise I'd give to everyone. Finally, a bit more details and world-building would be nice. Punctuation and grammar are not too bad, though it needs editing since you seem to be confusing some words.
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Trials

I did like the plot of the story and the premise of the time jump. However, there are quite a few technical issues. First of all, especially in the prologue, you keep mixing up the tenses, jumping from present simple to past simple which make reading it a bit difficult. In addition, I'd suggest shortening your chapters as too long chapters are quite tiresome. Finally, punctuation needs work, but not too much that took me out of the story. Keep up the hard work!

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Xavier's Rose

I liked the fact that the protagonists connected from their childhood. However, the plot is a bit slow and it feels like the book is going to be really long without giving many cliffhangers and surprises to keep the interest. Grammar and punctuation needs work, too. Maybe grammarly could help.
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Searching for acceptance

I enjoyed the story a lot. Hoping for an update! The plot was interesting, with just enough mystery to keep me entertained, and the female character was unusual for this kind of stories. Kudos on that!
The only thing that I didn't like, or understand, is that she had a panic attack walking outside, but on the next page she was meeting family and going to Vegas. It felt like a plot hole.
Other than that, it was great. Keep up the good work!

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Sold to your king

Ok, first of all, the female protagonist, Freya, was all over the place. She started as a sweet, scared girl, and literally on the next page she fell in love with someone who she called an abuser in the same breath. Also, she's just as bad as him in the end, in a way that doesn't make her a strong character but a twisted one. Now, I don't mind dark, murderous characters, but it felt like there was no explanation at all for her transformation.

For the technical part, there were parts were you used the wrong words (eg wear instead of were) that could be fixed with a good edit. Consider using an online editor that would also help with punctuation (like grammarly).
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What lies inside

The story tries to set up a mystery but it feels like it fell short, mainly due to not vivid enough descriptions. Also, the author keeps mixing up the tenses, from present to past simple, which disturbs the reading flow. I'd suggest fixing those first of all.

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Unspoken love

I loved everything about this story, from the background info to the perfectly described darkness of each character. I definitely recommend it

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Interesting!

The plot is really interesting with a dynamic start. I was a bit confused with the timeline at first, with all the back and forth, but ok. Also, a lot of the sentences are too short, cutting abruptly. I'm not sure I like that style of writing, but in your case it made the story more tense which was nice.
A few grammatical errors, especially regarding the tenses you use, but nothing that a good edit can't fix.
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My sister's wedding

The story has promise but I prefer to see the characters interacting more instead of just telling us about the relationships. Alexis' reaction also seemed a bit over the top, but that's just for my tastes. Good job!

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The enchantress and the demon dragon

I liked the descriptions in the story! The plot is promising, though I'd like to read more in order to have a full opinion. A few grammar mistakes that can be fixed with a good edit. Keep up the good work!

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The assassins' beast

The plot is interesting, though a little predictable as you can tell they're mates from the first chapters. I like a little bit more mystery to it! There are quite a few typos, grammar and punctuation errors that pull you out of the story sometimes. You should look into editing the story a bit more. All in all, an enjoyable read! Keep up the good work!

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The Scarlet Demon

The plot was interesting and the mythology and world-building pretty great. However, there are a lot of things that aren't sufficiently explained and make the plot confusing, hence the 4 stars. Keep up the good work!

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The Eldian tales

The story has promise. Apart from separating your dialogue bits to their own paragraph, the way you divide your story into chapters needs work, too, as you change the chapter while the same scene plays out. The relationship between the two main characters should go deeper, as you have them behaving like brothers but there's no actual bonding happening.
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Good job!

A very realistic portrayal of the struggles of an orphaned girl. Your writing was nice and there were only a few typos. The end was too good to be true, but fit well with the hopeful image the story portrayed. Good job!

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Stranded in thoughts

The writing got confusing a lot of times. The pace was too slow for me, and there was no immediate connection between your opening chapter and the rest of the story. I also think you should provide a list of the foreign words you use and their meaning in English at the end of each chapter. I had to google some, like "Sinturon Ni Hudas."
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Split the deck

The character with the multiple personality disorder is very interesting. The writing, though, needs a little bit of refining since the story gets confusing some times. The plot is very promising! Keep up the good work!

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The girl who stopped time

One of the best stories I've read on inkitt. Unique plot, great world-building, and a strong female character. It needs a sequel!
A few grammar mistakes, though. You keep mixing up your-you're, were-we're, and to-too. Fix these up and your book will be awesome.

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Ray of sunshine

Some suggestions to the author:
1. The world building is a bit flat. You should consider enriching your descriptions.
2. Your chapters are too small and it doesn't make sense how you separate them. They don't move the plot forward.
3. A lot of punctuation and grammar mistakes. You should consider an online editor.

All these made it quite difficult to follow and enjoy the story. Perhaps a good edit can change all that.
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Nice plot!

I enjoyed reading this story. Plot wise, it was really interesting and it had many twists. You can't even decide who you want the love interest to be, yet. The only thing that I'd consider in need of fixing is the cousins that keep coming out of nowhere. It's like you invented them just to get the protagonist out of difficult situations, and then gave them a backstory as an afterthought. That's how I read it, anyway.
For the technical part, a few punctuation mistakes and some sentences which need shortening.
A lot of potential for this story!

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Interesting

The story has an interesting beginning, especially the one with the police station at the very first lines. There are a few grammar mistakes. One thing I suggest is to separate the dialogue bits. When different people speak, it shouldn't be in the same paragraph. Keep up the good work!

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Destined to the Alpha

The story started to turn good only halfway through. For the first half, I wasn't overly fond of how spineless Jade was when it came to Jordan. In general, I don't enjoy the books that have the characters just falling in love because of a mate bond without even knowing each other. It screams manipulation to me. That being said, when she started getting her own powers the story was nice. If you edit a few technical errors it'd be even better!

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Mr. Nerd

The story is promising and the double identity intriguing. There are a lot of technical mistakes, though, that make the chapters hard to read. For one thing, you should consider shortening your sentences instead of jumbling everything together. Your grammar needs a bit of work, too. Keep up the good work!

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Good story

The story starts with an interesting twist. Emotions are well described. Keep it up!

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Great!

The story has some really good descriptions. The world-building and the mythology behind it are pretty great, too. The pace quick and providing as much info as necessary to keep it interesting. I really enjoyed this!

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North AMerican Werewolves

The story was okay, although it had a plot hole that put me off almost from the start. The romance between the protagonists was too abrupt. In fact, I wouldn't even call it romance, considering that they just announced to her that she's the king's mate while she had just learned about werewolves, and she just accepted that and they got together. Also, she was the chosen mate of one of his friends who just handed her over like a piece of meet. These two facts made it unable for me to read further, I'm afraid.

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Coming home to you

I liked the writing style a lot, but the end was a bit too cheesy for my tastes. The only other issues I found was a tense mix-up, where simple present turned to past present within the same paragraph. A couple of typos as well. Other than that, the whole experimenting thing and a strong female character were really interesting.

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No connection

Your plot is a bit confusing. You should consider defining the timeline a little bit better. Also, I didn't feel any connection between your protagonists. The female character especially was really unlikable. It just didn't make any sense, her obsession with Max. I'd suggest to strengthen their background and motivations.
A few technical errors as well.

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Sorry

I'm so sorry but I didn't manage to finish reading your uploaded chapters. There are severe issues with the English language that make the book unreadable and the plot chaotic. I didn't get what the plot was supposed to be about.
I'd suggest combing through it. As it is now, it needs a lot of editing.

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Kara

I enjoy the story so far. The strong female character is a big plus. Keep those chapters coming!

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Good plot

I liked the plot of the story. However, you should consider shortening your sentences and using punctuation to make it easier to read. The dragon character was a nice touch. With a good editing, your story could turn out great!

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Good plot

I liked the plot of the story. However, you should consider shortening your sentences and using punctuation to make it easier to read. The dragon character was a nice touch. With a good editing, your story could turn out great!

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Alpha of Aberdeen

The story has potential. The dialogue though felt stilted and I'd suggest to also enrich your descriptions instead of simply narrating what the characters are doing as they''re doing it. It felt like reading from a list. There also are quite a few technical errors. With a good edit it could turn into a nice story.

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Fairytale with a twist

An interesting twist of a popular fairytale. The timeline, though, is a bit confusing, as is how the protagonists travel from one universe to another using the carpet. Character depth and motivation could also use a little bit more work.
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Check the tenses

The story could be made more enjoyable if you work on the tenses. Present simple suddenly becomes past simple, and sometimes within the same sentence. Keep up the good work!

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Needs editing

A lot of technical errors, especially regarding English and grammar, that made the work hard to read. I'd suggest a few rounds of editing. Keep up the effort!

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Red Woods

The mystery created with the dream sequence was interesting. I felt though that there were too many dialogue bits. You should try to be a bit more descriptive, especially emotionally. Also, the summary should allude to the paranormal aspect of the story.

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Fallen crown

I wasn't very fond of the POV changes inside the same chapter. May I suggest keeping each chapter to one person's POV, or write from the POV of an all-knowing narrator? There were a few typos and technical errors as well. The plot could have potential with a bit more explanations, like the German that keep popping up.

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Brimstone

I really enjoyed this story as it was well written. The mystery was interesting and the main character was well plotted-out. Keep up the good work!

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The War

I love how you've set up the beginning of your story. It manages to catch the attention right from the very first sentence. Your writing style is interesting; it's been ages since I've read something that much different. A few grammar and punctuation mistakes, but nothing a good edit cannot fix. Overall, it is really well-written so far.
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