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A bitingly witty story - no disguise here

"Dhira takes a Cinderella-style story idea and gives it a new dimension. She takes Isla and paints a new picture of a child of divorced parents. She's not pathetic and sad, she's a free-thinking emotionally independent young girl who uses her wit to help her deal with the situation. Her father is also a very realistic character in that he's in love and he's not walking on broken glass just to make sure his daughter is all right. I think he knows in his heart she will be. Dhira's descriptions of Jacky and Isla's first impression of her were both very funny. By "showing" instead of merely "telling", she puts us right there as innocent bystanders who can't help but stop and gawk, but not with binoculars like the perverted boy next door. This thought leads to what happens with the boys. Isla has a little fun with her stepbrother-to-be. Her description of him as being the boring sort of handsome gave me pause and wonder just what she means by this, but that's up to the imagination of us all. These two chapters have drawn me in and looking forward to the others."

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