A good start

"Though I love your writing style; perfecting it is key! Try finding some form of giving away more details without losing that poetic-historic sound to the way you write as well as keeping to that short quickness. Example: "...Remembering what he was; A step back I took, and he bared his fangs..." Changed that on line just to show you an example of how to keep it short-and-sweet. Doing this you'll find you might want to write even more lines in as now your chapter would shorten and hence it is viable to add more details without an overload of information - something I'm still struggling with myself. Writing a cross mythology novel - especially between Greek/Roman/Norse - it is important to remember that all the myths are told through poems; so it would be nice to keep to a poetic sense when heading into that mystic world when not in the modern day with Hanna (I'm presuming is you protagonist) Also give some more thought to Punctuation though in historic poetry few is used; this is at the end of the day a modern tale - so adding some pauses would add to Hanna (as she read from the podium) picturing the scene before her giving the readers even more sense to what Hanna might be feeling as she reads. NB!! Great job on the 1st re-write of ch 1! I could place myself perfectly in Hannah's predicament and feel her angst! And though not much changed in her speech/recital I could better feel her emotions having gotten a sense of who she is in the beginning! So really, really, REALLY well done! These are just a few quick suggestion but nothing firm as only 1 chapter up and is really the only reason why I marked plot as a 3; but I know that it will be great hence why the 4 on overall! You have a great start and I'm positive that as you continue to write there will be no denying that this review's rating is low!!! So use it as motivation that there is a lot of potential waiting to burst from this what you are creating and go out over and beyond!"