What is your opinion?
Interesting plot
"Nice writing. The last chapter leaves reader with a sense of interpretation as it doesn't clarify whether the dead twin kills the other one at the moment or in the future. This makes it suitable for the reader to imagine any ending suitable to them. Later, in the epilogue, we are confirmed that the other twin dies as well but as chilling reading this was, it was equally fun to be able to learn something out of this story. "
Awesome
"Very Good Hiya! Keep it up"
A fine attempt
"First of all, I found the idea of a ghost speaking in a hushed tone, which makes it seem like a different language altogether, to be very unique. Creative thinking indeed. But you don't need to translate it every time the ghost speaks. Just translate for 4-5 times initially, and afterward, let the readers try and figure it out on their own. Overall the story is good. Since it is a short story, you could have either made the chapters a bit lengthier or added another chapter or two, giving an insight into how Disha managed to "get rid" of her sister. That would have been indeed a slightly deeper insight into the story. Ignoring a few grammatical errors, the plot is quite good. The way you began the first chapter was nice, beginning with a universal statement and then going forward to describe the whole backdrop. You could have introduced a few more characters, like her parents ( or any one parent or her friend, with obviously taking care of the backdrop simultaneously (ref to backdrop of the movie- Shinchan and Adventures in Henderland) ). Your writing style is appreciable. The usual narration and the manner in which you tried to describe the thoughts going through Disha's head were indeed good. By the way, your 9th point in the 3rd Chapter was indeed very helpful :)"
Good work
"I liked the plot of this story. The writing style could be improved though. Although it did seem like the movie alone in the starting but when the story ended I knew it wasn't the same as Alone. Keep up the good work! "
