Ann Blair

Heart speaks....

I liked your poems. You should definitely write more. I'd love to read more poems from you

Die for love

First of all I liked the effort that the author put into the book. It takes a lot of effort, time and determination to not just start a story but to finish it.
Second of all, there were a lot of grammatical and spelling errors which can be fixed with a few edits but the author's writing style can be improved.

Last but not the least, there were a few things in the book that bothered me a bit. The book started from Annie being chased by a crazy stalker but ends with John fighting Son Lee to marry Karie. I don't know whether to base the story on Annie's experience or Karie's experience. The two plots could have been deeply covered in two different books. That way more details from Annie's past could have been covered.

Since the title of the book is Die for Love, I assume the book to be based on Karie. In that case vivid details about Annie's abduction and her emotions shouldn't have been mentioned and instead Karie and John's story could have been covered. Annie's pov is unnecessary.

I found it very cliche yet impractical how John fell in love with Karie. I know they were good friends when they were young but someone cannot just fall in LOVE with a person whom they had last seen years ago. It just doesn't seem practical.

It seemed very impractical when the whole world literally bent for John's love. His bosses let him leave the company for love, a martial arts expert offered to train him so that he could win a match for his love. He literally defeated a person who had practiced martial arts for years with just 12 days of training. It's like seeing the world with rose coloured glasses.

Though the plot of the story was cliché, the author has potential. With practice and experience your work can become even better and you might even end up being famous. I wish the author good luck for his future books 😊.

Amazing plot

The plot of the story is intriguing. It keeps the readers wanting for more. There are some grammatical and punctuation errors that the writer can work on for example in the beginning of chapter 3, the tense of the narration changed to present tense and after a few lines it changed back to the past tense. Other that that the vivid descriptions added on to the beauty of the story. Well done!

I liked the story

I liked the plot of the story but there were a lot of grammatical and punctuation errors that the author can work on. There were a few impractical in the story like how Austin's parents were over a hundred years old (it's possible if werewolves were immortal) and about the way Shachi's dad brutally beat her. The way the author has described Shachi should have needed immediate medical attention. She spat out blood and her abdomen turned a shade of purple (which I guess doesn't happen when you're kicked in the stomach. Bruises turn purple due to lack of blood circulation and coagulation. When an internal organ is damaged, physical signs of the damage/healing is not really that visible I guess.) with that kinda pain walking to school should have been so painful. Shachi's mother needs to divorce that man. She could have lodged a complain and as proof she could have showed them Shachi's bruises. The school canteen can be the witness of the case. They can tell the court that she skipped meal many times because she didn't have money.

Damn relatable!

I could relate to almost all the poems in the book. The topics you have picked are so relatable. It's like a compilation of experiences that almost everyone goes through but feels lonely while experiencing those events because there's no one you can talk to. Good job!

Good job!

I like the overall plot of the story and I'm eager to read more. There are areas of improvement in the author's writing style and technical writing skills.

Good work

I liked the plot of this story. The writing style could be improved though. Although it did seem like the movie alone in the starting but when the story ended I knew it wasn't the same as Alone. Keep up the good work!