What is your opinion?
Great start
"I really like your descriptions and I guess this is the first book I didn't find any error. The only problem was the dialogue. If you can try to write dialogues in next line. As for the plot, this is only first chapter. There sure is a mystery and will wait for it to be revealed.\ Keep writing!"
Under researched
"Hey, sorry for the low rating, I know it is not very encouraging as a writer, but you said that 'ren' is a sociopath, that would mean they would not react to convoys well, yes. But it is more like overeating. You might want to say a psychopath. One more thing hacking don't work like that. If you want to talk a bit more and in detail about this feel free to ask on my wall. The plot has potential but a little more research is needed. Hope this helps!"
