What is your opinion?
Intriguing!
"This was a great read, very well paced for a one-shot. I like that you kept the language authentic to the era of the story. I also commend you on giving us characters that have depth even though it was short. The only two critiques I have are: 1 - There are some spelling issues, and I noticed in two places that there are unfinished sentences at the end of a paragraph that left me wondering if there was more to the story, or if we might have missed something important. Or, maybe they were overlooked in a round of editing? 2- The maiden left me curious about her background and there isn't much revealed about how she came about raising the dragon, and I would love to know more about that. (Though, since this is a one-shot, if her background is not technically relevant to the story then it makes sense why we do not know much about it.) I think that if you ever add to this or expand it into something bigger, it would be a wonderful addition to the story. Anyways, the character development is impressive given the length of the story. Overall, this was a great, and refreshing read for me and I would be excited to see you do more with it! Keep up the great writing and thank you again for the review you gave me on my own work. I hope I was helpful!"
Very Interesting and Different!
"This is such an interesting one-shot. I really liked it! I really like how it is written, the overall feeling of the story was very nice. I really felt like I was in that time with them, I could see Belfrontes shift from hero to madman, how he lost his morals over time, how the thrill of killing overwhelmed him until it became him. Very, very well done. Like with the other story I read of you I have to say that I really like your style of storytelling. The way you tell your story is intriguing and fresh, not many authors write in such a style anymore. I personally really like it and I definitely encourage you to continue with this style and practice it more and more. It really suits the settings you write and the whole theme and atmosphere that you try to set. Totally love it. There were a few things that didn't sit well with me, though. I found that some parts went by rather rushed. They went by with a blink of the eye, perhaps you could take a look at that? There were some mistakes in the spelling too, but it are just those a quick read through could fix, nothing too major. Oh, and a few sentences weren't complete, just so you know. Also, when Belfrontes enters the cave the maiden immediately starts to cry at his feet. She isn't shocked to see him, she doesn't question him first, get's angry, takes a defensive stand before the dragon, she just... throws herself in front of him and begs and cries. Then without much of a fight she just says 'okay but at least let me take his blood.' Idk, it bothers me a bit how quickly she gives in. Anyways, that is just my personal opinion. I did like how she got her revenge, how she finally freed herself and her kids in the end. It definitely has potential and it's a great storyline. If you finetune it you can perhaps enter it in a few short story writing contest. You seriously have so much talent and I just love the stories you come up with and the style you write them in. It just all seems to fit together perfectly, from start to finish it keeps your interest and keeps you wanting only more. I hope you never stop writing! Keep it up and share your passion, it is a wonderful gift you have!"
Heroic Ending! :)
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