Kylie R. Trask

Just a girl in her twenties in love with writing stories. I'm also a mommy to a beauiful baby girl, and a lover of fantasy & sci-fi. <3

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Intriguing!

This was a great read, very well paced for a one-shot. I like that you kept the language authentic to the era of the story. I also commend you on giving us characters that have depth even though it was short.

The only two critiques I have are:
1 - There are some spelling issues, and I noticed in two places that there are unfinished sentences at the end of a paragraph that left me wondering if there was more to the story, or if we might have missed something important. Or, maybe they were overlooked in a round of editing?
2- The maiden left me curious about her background and there isn't much revealed about how she came about raising the dragon, and I would love to know more about that. (Though, since this is a one-shot, if her background is not technically relevant to the story then it makes sense why we do not know much about it.) I think that if you ever add to this or expand it into something bigger, it would be a wonderful addition to the story. Anyways, the character development is impressive given the length of the story.

Overall, this was a great, and refreshing read for me and I would be excited to see you do more with it! Keep up the great writing and thank you again for the review you gave me on my own work. I hope I was helpful!

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Loving this story!

This is very well written so far! I am excited to learn more about the princes and their different personalities, and the main character - Liliya is adorable. I love her soft presence and her sense of duty to her kingdom. You are doing a fantastic job writing each character individually and giving glimpses of their personalities. The only thing I noticed were some grammar issues, but those are easily fixed during revision/editing. Keep writing- loving this story. :)

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