Kylie R. Trask

Fresh and Intriguing

Dystopian fiction used to be my favorite genre. I haven’t read much of it for a while, but this story reminded me of why I loved it. The first chapter was really well written, and I was amazed at all the tiny, intricate details that were included to give the reader a deeper view of the story and plot. My only complaint was that it was a little hard to get through because there was a lot of information that I didn’t understand yet. However, it wasn't off-putting. Everything was clean and well written with lots of depth, so I was still excited to see what happened next.

The characters are interesting, and the following chapters paint a great picture of Mina and Caleb’s life in a world after a nuclear fallout while still struggling with being a teenager. I loved everything about this story, it felt a little like home jumping back into a genre I used to love. I am excited to see what happens in Part Two. Great writing and story!

Colorful Cast

This story has a great, colorful cast of characters- all with their own unique personalities and appearances. I really enjoyed this because it makes them relatable and intriguing. The plot seems interesting. It's not something I typically read, but I was reeled in by the mystery if Amber's character and am excited to see how she navigates being the new girl as well as the 'it's girl in a new school.

The writing style is executed well. I only had a little bit of trouble with the bits where multiple characters were being introduced at once. I just had to read a bit slower to orient myself and make sure I was understanding who was who. Which, again was not difficult with so many characters that have great individual voices once I made the connections.

In just the first two chapters I am invested in what will happen with Amber, and the rest of the cast. Great start to the story, well written and colorful!

Beautiful

This was, in a word, beautiful.

With a whole cast of characters introduced and being immediately submerged in the plot, you'd think you would be confused but every single character has a unique voice, the world is vivid and the amount of information about how it works is very easy to follow while still being deep and intriguing!

I am so excited to continue seeing updates to this story and any other work put up by the author! You are so talented and this book is a work of art!

Intriguing!

This was a great read, very well paced for a one-shot. I like that you kept the language authentic to the era of the story. I also commend you on giving us characters that have depth even though it was short.

The only two critiques I have are:
1 - There are some spelling issues, and I noticed in two places that there are unfinished sentences at the end of a paragraph that left me wondering if there was more to the story, or if we might have missed something important. Or, maybe they were overlooked in a round of editing?
2- The maiden left me curious about her background and there isn't much revealed about how she came about raising the dragon, and I would love to know more about that. (Though, since this is a one-shot, if her background is not technically relevant to the story then it makes sense why we do not know much about it.) I think that if you ever add to this or expand it into something bigger, it would be a wonderful addition to the story. Anyways, the character development is impressive given the length of the story.

Overall, this was a great, and refreshing read for me and I would be excited to see you do more with it! Keep up the great writing and thank you again for the review you gave me on my own work. I hope I was helpful!

Loving this story!

This is very well written so far! I am excited to learn more about the princes and their different personalities, and the main character - Liliya is adorable. I love her soft presence and her sense of duty to her kingdom. You are doing a fantastic job writing each character individually and giving glimpses of their personalities. The only thing I noticed were some grammar issues, but those are easily fixed during revision/editing. Keep writing- loving this story. :)