What is your opinion?
Short, but detailed and thorough.
"It was a good, thorough read. Details were spot on and the writing style was different from what I am used to, but very much enjoyed it. A good and different erotica because the character is alone. "
How it's done!
"I really liked the story, mainly because it goes into a lot of physical detail about how this woman masturbates, and it seems very realistic. That is something you don't often read: real and detailed descriptions of sexual practices, almost unembellished by excess or exageration. You might consider adding a bit more about what the subject is thinking. Does she have detailed fantasies or just vague, ephemeral thoughts? I think that could add more spice to the story. Personally I don't like the last line, when we are told that someone is coming in the door. Before that it had been so positive, and peaceful in a way. Given the level of shame our society loads onto masturbation, the last line delivers a negative tension that kind of spoils what came before. It would be different if there was another chapter; then the story could reach a resolution. But as it is, I think it just leaves a negative residue on a story that was otherwise so positive. I really like your work! Take the above as an attempt at constructive criticism."
