What is your opinion?
Useemely life of miss Hartley
"I really enjoyed reading the novel . It had drama ,romance,action , and family fude. I also really enjoyed the authors writing style but their were same errors here and there but even thought it was a fantastic novel and I loved every pit of it 😍"
The unseemly life of miss hartley
"This book had an interesting story and kept me reading. I wish the story had continued after they were married "
The Unseem Life Of Miss Hartley
"Excellent reading. Intrigue, love, mystery. Travels through Europe "
The Unseemly Life of Ms Hartely
"A very entertaining plot and storyline .Fascinating love story "
The unseemly life of Miss Hartely
"Love the story.❤️"
The Unseemly Life of Miss Hartley
"Loved the story. Few grammatical errors but once properly edited, a great read."
The Unseemly life of Miss Hartely
"Live this story, plots was good. "
The unseemingly life of miss Heartley
"the story is catchy, I couldn't get my eyes off it. I love. It's beautiful and an original. "
Twists and turns
"I am really enjoying this book. The characters feel real with their normal silly thoughts they sometimes keep to them self about what the other one is thinking until they feel comfortable enough to actually speak openly with each other. There is a lot of twist and turns with events that you don’t see coming as well."
Nice
"I like the book. The duke is witty and my favourite character."
The Unseemly Life of Miss Hartley
"This was a very entertaining great. I enjoyed the drama and the intrigue. You fall in love with the characters and really hope that in the end they find their way back to each other. "
Ending needs work
"The last few chapter seem like the story ended too quickly. The situation was very threatening for most of the book, but everyone just walks away unharmed basically in the end."
The Unseemly Life of Miss Hartley
"Firstly, excuse me if sound harsh, but I tend to be thorough and honest in my reviews, so bear with me. This is my personal opinion; you can take it or leave it. The story is nice. You have a good plot and I really like how you build tension at the end of each chapter. The first couple chapters were all about narration and introducing the characters. Here, I have two points to tell. 1: Don't dump everything the reader needs to know about the main character in one go. 2: Usually, the first chapter is life-changing for the character. Something unexpected happens that changes the character's life, hooks the reader, and gives them something look forward to in the next chapters—which was not the case. I kept reading to see if something in Alicia's life will change, and to me it was when The Marquess cornered her that night, asking her about her father. You have an interesting set of characters. I won't say a lot about them since you claim they're all real characters—except the protagonists. Alicia is a brave and a curious girl. I like that she wants to prove that she can do anything, protect herself and her father as well, in a world where women we're still deprived from their rights. But she was naive as well. Like that time when Alicia accepted Eloise's offer to spend the night at her house. Alicia easily accepted. She would've sat at the bar with that woman (no one will come after her since Eloise is the owner), struck a conversation about women suffragettes movements to build some sense of trust before going to her house. Make it realistic. Make her capable. It was naive of her to trust Louise. I think Nick is quite the decent guy. He might be a hapless Duke whom no one takes seriously, but if he pulls a few strings, he can get what he wants. He's smart and knows his way around. However, he just followed Alicia on sheer curiosity. There was no reason for him to follow Alicia but his curiosity to get answers and I found that a bit unreasonable. That's why I thought Alicia and Nick should've gotten a few sweet and coy moments together to get to know one another or build some chemistry between them before Alicia left England. It would've given Nick some good reason—following the girl he's crushing on. And it wouldve given Alicia something to think about other than her mission to find her father and protect him. Because later on, it felt like they got to know each other really fast. I know juggling mystery and romance isn't easy, but there should be some balance throughout the story. I like how both Nick and Alicia avoided a lot of trouble by threatening some people and deceiving them. It's almost surreal. Also, when Alicia first talked to Laurent, she convinced him that Austero is her uncle, right? Why couldn't Laurent notice that something is fishy when Alicia began talking about her family? Another thing I thought about is that these people are ranked, but they sounded so casual to me. I don't know if a girl like Alicia, who's of low dowry and class, should be casually talking to a Duke and saying "thank you" or "I'm sorry." Like when she finished dancing with him, I believe it should be like: "I'm deeply thankful for agreeing to my silly request. And please kindly forgive my inappropriate behavior." Technically, you don't give a lot of thought to details. I keep wondering how England, France, and Santorini looked like in the 1800s. And I find that I don't know. When they were dancing, I wondered: to what music were they dancing? What was famous at that time? How do French women dress to make Alicia look bizarre in her English dress? And even, why didn't Nick like the food when he first arrived to France? I know writers shouldn't be too detailed, but they shouldn't ignore it as well. Descriptions of the settings give an image in the reader's mind. I noticed you repeat the scenes from both POVs. It isn't favorable unless you want to show something really important from a different POV. When writing a dialogue, separate dialogues of different characters on different lines. And don't mix someone's action with someone else's dialogue. It's confusing. Your questions do not have question marks. I understand when it's a question that doesn't demand an answer like: who cares, or who knows, but your questions don't have questions marks. Also, pay attention to comma usage. Pay attention to dialogue punctuation, tags, and action beats: cases on how dialogues should be punctuated. -If the sentence is a statement: "I made coffee," he/she/they/I/my mother etc... said. (Note the comma and no capitalization) -If the sentence is a question or exclamation. "Do you want coffee?" he asked. "Wow! You look so beautiful!" he commented. - If the dialogue is followed by action beat: "I made coffee." He reached for two mugs from the cupboard (capitalization and point) For more visit https://thewritelife.com/dialogue-tags/ Also, numerals less than 101 should be spelled out in letters. Do not start a sentence with a numeral like in chapter 9: "30000 pounds?" It should be spelled out. Times are written like this: 7:00 p.m./ 8:00 a.m. etc . . . To cut someone off, use an em-dash (—). Why do you keep ending your with "I just." This means that your character is faltering, so it should be: "I just . . ." There are a lot of grammar mistakes that I can't put here. I can tell you to pay attention to "carriage and marriage", and pay attention to prepositions. Also, there's no I's. The correct possessive pronoun of the subject “I” is “my”. I sound really harsh, right? Excuse me again. If you want, I can point out some of the mistakes through comments. Your story is great. I like how you build tension and keep arising problems for Alicia. Please put Nick in a pitch as well. Let us see him struggling and fighting for the girl he loves. All you need is a little polishing and you're ready to go! Nice work and keep writing! :)"
The unseemly life of Miss Hartley
"Not too bad "
