What is your opinion?
- A story full of charms -
"An enchanting work in progress. Reading the below comments, I can see the writer is taking her writing very seriously, most of the recommendations are being taken into consideration as I write those lines. I am a true fantasy zealot, and this story reminds me of A Wizard of Earthsea by Ursula LeGuin. The writer has a style and its a delight to read. There are minor tweaks but as I said above, they’re being tackled. This is just the beginning and I can’t wait for what is to come. A Magic Gem!"
Good beginning
"This is a work in progress and I am looking forward to reading each chapter as it comes out. The story itself is good and well paced. The writer doesn't blow through the scenes leaving you confused, nor does the author drag on commentary or descriptions for longer than needed. I already like Seraphina's mischievous character and the side characters are realistic. I'm genuinely looking forward to the next chapter. As others have mentioned it does need some editing, but to me, this did not detract from the storyline. I understand that a lot of users (me included) often begin their drafts on these apps and save editing for later."
Very interesting...i love fantasy
"It's interesting and wants us to read more and more"
Fiery Childlike Zeal
"Seraphina is the type of protagonist every reader can root for. Her youthful upbringing reminds me of the female book characters I used to look up to when I was young. The only suggestion I can give right now is to keep writing. Some minor fixes on punctuation and dialog tags are also needed. I won't go technical here bc writing and refining your style can be learned. It's a heck of a journey. I hope I won't miss Seraphina's future ones too. :)"
review
"First of the plot of the story is promising. Quite good and you can see the potential on it. What the book needs improvement on is the editing of paragraphs and dialogue. They need to be separated instead of a whole mass. This will give the readers a good flow as they read. Also it will help the story structure look organized. I recommend some editing on that area as well as making sure punctuations are good. Don't forget to show emotions so you can capture the heart, body and soul of the reader. Nice beginning so keep it up."
