Good Beginning!

"Hi! So I really like the plot you have but I do see a lot of grammatical errors. Try checking out Grammarly! It will scan your work and fix the errors for you! There's a free version that I use I would have to highly recommend. Also your story seems to be missing certain details. I'm a bit confused about where your character are and what they're doing. You should also write out numbers instead of just doing the actual number up to 100. The first paragraph also confused me when she said she couldn't keep her earrings. You also said later only her friend but didn't describe what only her friend did. You're off to a great start though! "