Sundee Mattina

A thrilling read!

Honestly I'm blown away. I truly feel immersed into this world. I was a bit confused at the beginning but things quickly made sense. I was on the edge of my seat the entire time. I feel emotionally connected to these characters. The brave yet weary Lena and the alpha male Camael really come to life. It is beautifully written and I love your writing style. I haven't read many books like this but this story has me itching to read more! I wish I had more friends that liked to read because I would definitely recommend!

Good Beginning!

Hi! So I really like the plot you have but I do see a lot of grammatical errors. Try checking out Grammarly! It will scan your work and fix the errors for you! There's a free version that I use I would have to highly recommend. Also your story seems to be missing certain details. I'm a bit confused about where your character are and what they're doing. You should also write out numbers instead of just doing the actual number up to 100. The first paragraph also confused me when she said she couldn't keep her earrings. You also said later only her friend but didn't describe what only her friend did. You're off to a great start though!