What is your opinion?
short
"Story is very short, but it gives a nice intro and understanding of the characters- though I hope there is more coming in regards to her parents disappearance. "
Lacuna
"I love the mystery of the story. Not knowing everything about the characters right from the start is interesting. Your story has so much potential. There are some grammar and time tense mistakes but those can be easily fixed with Grammarly for instance. I can not wait to read more."
I love the book
"She really lost me somewhere but overall i love it, please keep writing"
I love the book
"I love the book but the author kinda lost me at chapter 3, to fix the problem I'd suggest for her to start the new chapters that she'll update later with flashbacks of the time Gali and his mate spent togethe, that'll help me as a reader build a connection to both characters, but regardless all that the book is amazing I can't wait for another update♥️ please continue writing it"
Not wordy
"Often beginner writers will write a paragraph when a sentence with good structure will do the trick. "
Nice work
"The story has a great start. It makes the reader read more and more. My advice to the author is to slow down the events. The story is already so great, but it could have been better if the next scene after the original first scene could have been an older girl having a childhood flashback about the mysterious man on the day of her parents' funeral. That way, it would not feel like time is passing too soon. And the reader could spend the whole funeral with the main character. That way, they could find how does she think, what kind of personality she has, who she is basically. This way, a connection could have been developed between the character and the reader. Every author has a different writing style, and your writing style is great. My other advice is to put ellipsis once a scene is finished, so it does not get confusing that a new scene has started. Otherwise, this story is excellent and has a good future."
