What is your opinion?
Beats!!!
"It's wonderful."
What Exactly is Love?
"Excuse me if I sound harsh, but I tend to be honest and thorough in my reviews to help as much as I can. This review is my personal opinion, so you can take it or leave it. I see you have a good plot, about two teenagers who are following their dreams and trying to understand what true love means. I liked Alex's parents—how they're pushing their daughter to forget about being number one in her class and focus instead on pursuing her dream in fashion. Alex's backstory is sad, and the way Max dealed with things was a bit unreasonable in my opinion. Couldn't he just ignore her instead of inflecting physical pain? I like Stacey's boldness, and how she's always there for her best friend, and sometimes I think Alex is being rude to her. Miller is something else. I wonder why you didn't introduce him early in the story as an actor who played roles in romantic series and etc... The way he approaches Alex is a bit forward, but I like that he cares and wants to reach her heart. Alex seems a bit hesistant: sometimes she's buying clothes and taking photos, and then she's still stuck on being the first in her class. Miller is her rival, but I feel as if she's treating him like her enemy and entirely blocking him. When Alex and Stacey went shopping and then photo-shooting, I kept wondering what clothes Alex is wearing. You're talking fashion, right? Then show me colors, patterns, fabric, design, makeup, shoes... Don't just say that they ordered this and that and took photos. Show me how Alex is posing for the camera and how she feels when the camera is on her. How does everyone look like? Is Alex beautiful? What's her distinctive feature? Describe the settings around your characters. In debate club, show me some interaction. What's the topic they're working on? Alex wants to expand her social circle and improve her social skills, right? Then show me what she's learning from the debate club and how her character will develop. Technically, there's a lot to tell, so please hang in with me: 1-You use "said" a lot to tag your dialogues—and in this case in don't know what tone of voice the characters are using, and sometimes you don't tag your dialogues (like in chapter 3 after being the ice-cream) and I don't know who's saying what. Thoughts aren't put between quotations, you can italicize them. 2-Pay attention to tense consistency. There's switching between present and past tenses. 3-In Smith's POV in chapter 7, you showed Alex's thoughts by saying: "I can't believe he noticed that!" Don't switch POVs 4-Only one punctuation mark is used, and a question mark is never followed by a point. 5-There are some grammatical mistakes and verbs that are used the wrong way: chapter 4: (skimmed through, not schemed through)/(clung, not clunked)/chapter 6: (scrunched up, not scrounged up)/ chapter 7: (heart flutter, not flatter) 6-Dialogue punctuation, tags, and action beats: cases on how dialogues should be punctuated. -If the sentence is a statement: "I made coffee," he/she/they/I/my mother etc... said. (Note the comma and no capitalization) -If the sentence is a question or exclamation. "Do you want coffee?" he asked. "Wow! You look so beautiful!" he commented. - If the dialogue is followed by action beat: "I made coffee." He reached for two mugs from the cupboard (capitalization and point) For more visit https://thewritelife.com/dialogue-tags/ 7-Describe body language to show more emotions. I hope I didn't sound harsh, and I hope this helps. You have a good plot in your hands and there's no need to rush things. Pour your feelings and colors into it, and I'm sure it'll shine. Don't give up and keep writing! :)"
