Tips?

"Hmm, this was better than I was expecting it to be. I only spotted 1 grammatical error, where it says the queen's age it has a 2 and an 'o' not 0. Also, you should change one 'shown' to a synonym of that. Having 2 'shown's felt repetitive. I've also learned that you shouldn't list off a character's description, reveal it as it becomes necessary. Like with the attribute. Instead of revealing it in the description, reveal it when he uses it in that secret room. Like this. "King uses his Gravity attribute to levitate queen and children" and continue. Maybe not that bluntly tho. Maybe you could foreshadow it earlier in the story, say if he were to use it to move faster on the way to the room. As I've heard many times before, Foreshadowing is key. I've heard that a lot of things are key though, so I just say everything is key. P.s. I bet I can beat you in chess, and speed, definitely speed. Muhahaha"